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0 posted 2001-09-18 11:34 PM



The Love I need stays hidden,
dormant like the moon during the day,
this earth bound body's forbidden
from recusancy in blocking self Love's ray.

Warm worth of the good Sun's virtue
stays distant from the naughty moonlit night,
what in celestial's plan is taboo
doth in my being naturally unite.

Let my different spheric orbs shine at once,
one (the kinder, larger) will control,
alone, the melacholic moon just hunts
the Yang it's Yin desires for peaceful soul.

The confluence in orbit of such light
smooths the jealous war o'er despairing waves,
then would such heavenly body's skywrite
magnetize a kindred sloar system's crave.

© Copyright 2001 Richard S. Wells jr. - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-09-18 11:40 PM


"the melacholic moon just hunts
the Yang it's Yin desires for peaceful soul."

me likes, me likes!

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2 posted 2001-09-19 12:06 PM


The Love I need stays hidden,
dormant like the moon during the day,
this earth bound body's forbidden
from recusancy in blocking self Love's ray.

Warm worth of the good Sun's virtue
stays distant from the naughty moonlit night,
what in celestial's plan is taboo
doth in my being naturally unite.
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very cool write here...
superb employ of theme & imagery, also vocabulary and rhyme,
muchly enjoyed the ethereal element of this,
as well as its cryptic, mystic, dark, essence
very cool indeed
jm

Well I looked to the sky for my anthem
The words and the music came through
But words and music can never touch
The beauty that I've seen in you

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3 posted 2001-09-19 10:27 PM


While I loved the whole poem your first line hit me hard. You've been reading my diary!! A beautifully written piece Sir Richard.
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4 posted 2001-09-19 11:17 PM


Sound to me like you have been spending too much time at Chinese take-out!   kidding...this was a strong poem, and my Yang isn't doing to well with it's Ying either!

~* If you want a rainbow, sometimes you just have to put up with a little rain *~

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5 posted 2001-09-20 01:34 AM


Thank you for all your kind comments. My intention was to display the difficulty in joining what we can accept about ourselves with what we don't want to and in the recognition and melding of these truths of good and not so we may become more attractive to another. In other words, Love yourself or dare not expect another to.
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6 posted 2001-09-20 06:43 PM


Bravo! Richard this is wonderful. And the advise you posted could not ring more true. Our virtue is recognizable and accepted first by ourselves, then others. Excellent scribe.

Sincerely,
Regina

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7 posted 2001-09-27 02:15 PM



You do write exceptionally well...this is wonderful....

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