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Open Poetry #15

The See (again!)

Samia
Junior Member

since 2001-07-28

Posts 47
Earth of corse!

0 posted 2001-09-15 01:19 AM

The See

Looking for the See
I stumbled and fell
on the road
through which I tried to swim.
I have seen the ocean -
roaring and grey
against the rocks.
Passionate anger swelling
and subsiding,
in a memory,
I saw, (I thought)
many times,
the surface break open with white lava,
and crash down upon it’s own heaving breast
to die alone in darkness.
But I could not follow there.
I stood in the
birth and death of desire,
as it moved,
and crumbled at the feet of the Sea.

Pip
Member

since 2001-09-14

Posts 59

1 posted 2001-09-15 02:08 AM

Wow! I'm dearly impressed. Your word choice was fantastic, bringing out some remarkable images, which, I'm sure, will send my careening into wonderful dreams of the sea. Not to mention your metaphor...gosh, we can't forget to mention that! Great job all around!

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