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The Energy of New York

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Severn
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0 posted 09-13-2001 11:47 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Severn

In New York
with three dear friends
not so long ago
gray clouds wrapped me around
through a wave-lapping wind
and I thought
those twin towers look like
giant lego blocks - they
are malformed, and cold.

Now, safely far away,
I understand
the thousands who once breathed
inside, who went home to
children and the embrace of
freedom and spouses, forming the hub
of that peerless New York
energy

were the warmth.

The life was inside the walls,
and not the facade.

That life is still inside, murdered
beneath the rubble of a symbol
and now as I stare at my two photos
of those lego blocks
I wish to God I could build them again
with my bare heart.

~with sorrow~ K


© Copyright 2001 Kamla Mahony - All Rights Reserved
Marge Tindal
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1 posted 09-14-2001 01:08 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Kamla~
Thanks.
These are trying times and it's good to have the compassionate support of friends around the globe.

Denise was just talking to me today about the trip
the four of you made there.
~*Marge*~

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2 posted 09-14-2001 05:06 AM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

This is a truly beautiful piece. I think at this time everyone wants to be able to do something as productive as rebuild or wish for a brighter outcome than is possible.
However, the best wishes and intentions are sometimes all we can offer and the best things we can.

I liked this piece for the honesty in it.

Thanks for sharing and keep writing.  

~AF~

"Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?"

[This message has been edited by anonymousfemale (edited 09-14-2001).]

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3 posted 09-14-2001 06:20 AM       View Profile for Bilby   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bilby

The cold-warmth element works well in this poem, giving it a simple core that is neatly observed.
cheers,
Alan
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4 posted 09-14-2001 07:16 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

I'm so glad that you had a chance to see New York City for yourself, K... and I'm really, really glad that you coerced me into meeting you there... I really am...

I like your poem, my dear friend..
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Marge-y...hello my friend. You know, you do have my support - and NZ's in fact...but this for me goes beyond support. I have had a deeply personal reaction to this tragedy. It has haunted my every waking moment - I see images all the time. Many other things seem insignificant. And I am so ashamed I ever thought those things looked like lego blocks...I feel like I cheapened the life within. This poem was a carthasis, in part...thanks for your kind response...

AF...thank you  - and I agree. Your words were simply, but astutely put.

Bilby - well, I didn't write this for its technicality...thank you for the observation though.

Nan - ok ok ok - enough of the coercion tale! I DID NOT coerce - I begged, you caved. Heh. And it's so odd hearing port authority on the tv now...so very odd. Love you too my friend...(hey - I'm glad you like this freeverse poem lol)

K

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Strange how one act can deeply alter how one looks at things...

thank you for this, Severn...
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I wish that I could be right there with you my friend. . .

Powerful, powerful work. . . well done. . .



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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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Thank you and your country for this and more.

  


Latest New Zealand News

Memorials in Auckland for victims of terrorist attack

15.09.2001 6.17 am

* St Michael's Anglican Church at 425 Great North Rd in Henderson will hold a candlelight service for the terrorists' victims at 7 pm tonight.

* St George's Anglican Church at 5 Landscape Rd in Papatoetoe is holding a memorial service at 3 pm tomorrow . The church will be open from 2 pm until 5 pm for people to pray, reflect and light a candle.

* Two appeals have been set up to help the families of firefighters who lost their lives in New York and Washington. Donations to both funds - the New York Firefighters Disaster Relief Fund and the NZ Firefighters Fund for American Firefighters - can be made at any branch of the Bank of New Zealand.
2001 New Zealand Herald Online


HK>LK



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Severn,
I'm glad you got to see then before they were blown away. Thank you and a very nice write.
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10 posted 09-14-2001 03:45 PM       View Profile for Trillium   Email Trillium   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Trillium

A fine poem and thank you for posting it.

Betty Lou Hebert

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Kamla,

Wonderful work, my friend.  You said it well.

Michael

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Very touching.. oh to "rebuild them with our bare hearts"  I have never been to New York, and the twin towers now in person I will never see, ..but the hearts of New Yorkers I have heard.. and they are true Americans..our sister and brothers. Proud to be an American.
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"I wish to God I could build them again
with my bare heart."

Kamla...hugs for this!
doreen peri
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you have built a monument to them here with your words and to the lives lost inside them...

a dynamic piece with a powerful ending...

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Severn,

I loved this because its all heart from you. Its wonderful that you take the time to think of this, and appreciate it.

*Jenn*
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Nations are always it's people and their character. Buildings are things and taken alone are indeed a matter of beauty in the eye of the beholder. You've recognized what's important here and we appreciate your fine verse. Thank you friend.
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I think it's fantastic the way the world has come together to show this is an offence against the human community -- not just the USA... thanks severn...
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Thank you for this.
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i urge you to submit this to the main site

please please please

i wish to God that i could build them again with my bare heart

Amen
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again, I'm reminded of the time that I spent inside the mighty twin towers. . . from there, I felt that I could see the world. . .

I see now, that in a way. . . I am. . .

thank you again my friend. . .  

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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I am so glad that our enemies are so outnumbered by our friends.  Thank you.  Joyce
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THis is a wonderfully written piece, You've captured the heart of the situation - the warmth of the hearts that died.
I'd help you with those Jegos
Take care, dear one
Liz
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Kamla,
Maybe if the world puts it's hearts together, we could rebuild it! This was ver emotional and touching. Thank you for your thoughts and for sharing....you are a dear soul...*HUGS* Debbie
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I was looking at my photos yesterday from our trip not so long ago and had similar thoughts, visualizing the people inside, wishing I could warn them, wishing I could turn back time. Very powerful poem, Kamla.
 
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