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constant camel |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I touch my lips in wonder-- whatever can I say to you? In the absence of your presence a lack of air shows blood true blue. Touch my thigh in sheer delight legs in cross of of lace-up boot... I have to look away from eyes-- so much of you I see in you. Constant licking of my lips constant camel searching sip-- oasis in this arid land-- oases of eyes understand... I have beheld your scent before- many times--I still want more... I wish for olive grove of sup-- I wish that I could wish enough. I wish for dances in the sand. I wish for trek of caravan, and silken tents to be our home and starlight sprinkles in the dome just as the sky bends down to me Just as the salt adds taste to sea even as the wind kicks dust turbulent unbridled lust to drink as much as I can stand and face again the trek of sand. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
wonderful images...and they do so help build on the meaning.... good stuff as usual!! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Constant licking of my lips constant camel searching sip-- oasis in this arid land-- oases of eyes understand... I have beheld your scent before- many times--I still want more... I wish for olive grove of sup-- I wish that I could wish enough. I wish for dances in the sand. I wish for trek of caravan, and silken tents to be our home and starlight sprinkles in the dome just as the sky bends down to me Just as the salt adds taste to sea even as the wind kicks dust turbulent unbridled lust to drink as much as I can stand and face again the trek of sand. ========================= Do you know how cool this poem is... what a clever working of metaphor and theme, as well as imagery.... Who knew there was rhyme water in the dessert???  very very cool write me twin...  meWell I looked to the sky for my anthem |
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