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SpitFire
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0 posted 09-10-2001 11:20 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for SpitFire

My eyes burn,
and I can wrap light strings around yours,
tangle up your sight instead of reading, in segments, or dinner.

I watch pages flit at my chest,
and it is the bronze that would do, every breath a humming storm,
every explanation held on itís back appropriately.

Somehow I have blood, and lungs,
and I am selfish now, with scratches from the binding,
with breakage from all the wrapping and unwrapping of sound.

My body rests, at night,
and I am treading somewhere on a street, in a city.
Imagine the distance in string, imagine every starving hour, imagine why.

I will close and stack whatís left,
and I will follow shadows if they lead,
I will chase them if they curl themselves the way that reminds me to worry.

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Duncan
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1 posted 09-11-2001 01:22 AM       View Profile for Duncan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Duncan

I doubt I understood a whole line of this the way that you intended but it sure sounded good coming off my tongue.  Sometimes that's enough.  
mirror man
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2 posted 09-11-2001 01:48 AM       View Profile for mirror man   Email mirror man   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mirror man

Yes, this is interesting.  
EagleOne
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3 posted 09-12-2001 06:01 AM       View Profile for EagleOne   Email EagleOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleOne

You conjure up the most amazing images in ones mind. Take care!

"Let me pierce the realm of glamour
So I know just what I am." ~ Van Morrison

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4 posted 09-12-2001 08:00 AM       View Profile for catalinamoon   Email catalinamoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit catalinamoon's Home Page   View IP for catalinamoon

Wow, somehow this hits even harder in light of the events of yesterday. I don't understand the whole poem either, but it felt painful.
Peace
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5 posted 09-12-2001 06:38 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

my friend. . . you do have that way of making people stop and consider your words. . .

well done. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

LarBear
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6 posted 09-24-2001 08:21 AM       View Profile for LarBear   Email LarBear   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LarBear

Humm,

I read this one three times. I have an idea to what it may mean, but that is my view.

Very interesting poem that makes one "Think"

LarBear
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7 posted 09-24-2001 11:29 AM       View Profile for Apachecat906   Email Apachecat906   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Apachecat906

My eyes burn,
and I can wrap light strings around yours,
tangle up your sight instead of reading, in segments, or dinner
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I really liked this first stanza, and also the end the best.  The strings make me think of how complicated and complex relationships can be, and then in the end you're left to put some order to it by "stack"ing what you can and going on from there.  I'm still thinking about the other lines, but I found  touches of pain and hope in your poem.  I'm sure to be far off from finding your intent, but I liked it anyway...A lot of complex emotion in your words. A Very interesting read!
DreamRomancer
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8 posted 09-24-2001 05:26 PM       View Profile for DreamRomancer   Email DreamRomancer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DreamRomancer

I must admit that the depth of this poem is beyond my comprehension, but any good poet should choose to learn instead of running away.  If you have a free moment, I would enjoy the opportunity to hear what your motivation and meaning were behind these lines.  Thanks for the help!

With my pen I shall create,
With my mind I shall explore,
With my strength I shall endure,
With my poetry I shall have legacy.

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wow
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