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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone 
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Wasted lingerie lying in a dusty corner with my heart. (in the spirit of 20 or less  ) |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh Catalinamoon....this is sooo good! Sexy but sad. Hugs, Nancy. ~Time has cast a spell on you |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
A few words that say it all, Sandra. But I've got this motto, too. If trouble is in the air? Or even indifference, I wear my finest and look my best---I like to look GOOD walking out of the door!  Hugs, sweet lady. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Jeez, Sanda, with those few words you create the setting for an entire story...almost like looking at pictures of a crime scene and imagining what had occured...this is EXCELLENT!! |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
lol @ serenity. She's got that right. cat---If both are as you say, still lying in the corner...it's only a matter of time until a man of taste walks into the room and reaches... I enjoyed the style of this alot. |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
Catalinamoon....I like this style..sad but a good read..I do have to agree with Duncan... alan |
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The Rusty Knight Member
since 2001-08-29
Posts 414Texas |
Talk about a pitcure with very few brush strokes. You captured the moment. Death comes not when we cease to breathe, but when we cease to dream. |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Very sad but a very cool write with just so few words I enjoyed!Sauni @~~~>~~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
CatalinaMoon~ Very effectively done~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Nice work, Catalina. Your choice of image is very scandalous, I commend you on it. Isolation of the word "lying" was a good idea. Enjoyed. ~Allan They call me a madman, but I'm not mad at anyone. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Is it red? James |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
LOL! James is a devil! Not wasted, at least you still have it! I know some that have thrown in for flannel! Great write Sandra! Sincerely, Regina |
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Apachecat906 Member
since 2001-09-04
Posts 217Michigan, USA |
What a great image. I think I'll use this to warm up my empty library. To remind me that great poetry doesn't have to be eighteen pages of alliteration and rhyme and all the stuff I cant figure out. PS You could replace "in a corner" with "in the back of the second drawer" hmmmpf stupid men. [This message has been edited by Apachecat906 (edited 09-10-2001).] |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
Powerful sad write..... You've captured it so well Thank you ********************* |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
this could be a new form. . . what to call it??? I love it. . . ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
I would say that it's time to dust those off. I may have to try some of these. |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Cat, Cheers smile. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love |
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Topheth Member
since 2001-09-08
Posts 297Texas |
Nicely done. The spirit of twenty words or less? I like that idea. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Wow, Sandra... I'm flattered and very impressed -- you've done my "TWENTY OR LESS..." form tremendous justice. This was very visually potent and the sentiment leaves a lasting impression... things like this should never be "wasted"... ;-> -MVS "It's all in the details -- the Big Picture always takes care of itself." |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
washed dancing to the clothes line of fresh air hugs...helen |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Excellent job - now this was a poetry feast! *~If you can't say anything nice about someone, don't say anything at all*~ |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Sandra, WOW! this was so good. Short and to the point. Loved it. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nicely done!! Excellent short verse to capture such large feelings...Loved this!!! |
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