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Rex Allen McCoy
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Sippin a Timmy's in London

0 posted 2001-09-09 10:12 PM



He should Feel what I Feel
    ~~~


Standing by the window one morning
    blankly staring down the lane
Deep in ponder
    waking up
Fresh brewed coffee
    steaming hot
When suddenly I saw it ...

but through the rain
    my vision wasn't clear

So with eyes blinking
    I stepped closer
and wiped condensation from the pane

A nose pressed to the cold damp glass
    brought a shocking apparition from the past

It struck an arrow through my heart
with ghostly pain

Coffee splashed upon the floor
    as I hastened toward the door
the pound of clapping thunder in my chest

Fumbling blindly at the lock
    slid it back and turned the knob
Raw desperation
    put sagging hinges to the test

Racing frantic through the rain
    wildly screaming out her name
tires spun as drunken driver sped away

There I sobbed upon the ground
    two hands ... gripped mud
and nearly drowned

Naught before me but a memory
    gone insane
    ~~~

Dedicated to a friend who lost a loved one to a drunk driver ...

© Copyright 2001 Rex Allen McCoy - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-09-09 10:56 PM


Very nice..
The memory is always there...
No matter what and how much time.

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

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2 posted 2001-09-09 11:02 PM


Well done Rex.  Something that we all should be reminded of from time to time.  Nancy.

~Time has cast a spell on you
  so you won't ever forget me~

Sunshine
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3 posted 2001-09-17 11:09 AM



I had missed this...

thank you Rex, for even writing of heartache....

Songbird
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Missouri
4 posted 2001-09-17 11:52 AM


All the emotions and feelings here can be applied to our current news as America is grieving, wounded by a hit and run driver. This is a good piece of writing.
Nan
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5 posted 2001-09-17 11:57 AM


A loss of one or five thousand is equal in the hearts of those left behind.  Thank you, Rex, for sharing this.
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6 posted 2001-09-17 06:52 PM


indeed. . . well done my friend. . .

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Kit McCallum
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7 posted 2001-09-18 06:09 AM


You've captured the moment with incredible clarity Rex ... powerfully written.

Best wishes,
/Kit

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