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Dee
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0 posted 2001-09-10 11:04 PM


When you walked away from me
and left me here all alone
you took with you, my true love
the most precious thing I own.
You took away my heart and
I could never love again.
You’re not just my only love,
you are my dearest friend.
I didn’t mean to hurt you
and I never meant to say
our love wasn’t worth the price
you had wanted me to pay.
You know my heart is breaking
and I need you here with me.
I’ll take what you have to offer and
I’ll be what you want me to be.

I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life.     a brand

© Copyright 2001 Dee Manders - All Rights Reserved
Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2001-09-10 11:16 PM


Dee~
Oh, sweetie ... I hope that lovely smile becomes bright again~

Don't just settle for what he has to offer ...
unless it's all of his love, as committed as yours~

Sending GREAT BIG HUGS~
Love ya'
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
                                   noles1@totcon.com            

Dee
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2 posted 2001-09-10 11:39 PM


Marge, the smile is still there.   Just one of those moods I guess. Thanks for accepting my invite.  


Dee

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3 posted 2001-09-11 12:05 PM


.... a smile is a precious thing, hold onto it with all your heart... (well done!)
Dee
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4 posted 2001-09-11 12:16 PM


Daniel, welcome to Passions and thank you for taking the time to read what I have to say.  

Dee

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5 posted 2001-09-11 12:28 PM


This is a very touching poem.  Hope life gets brighter and happier for you.

Betty Lou Hebert

Janet Marie
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6 posted 2001-09-11 01:05 AM


just one of those moods you say???
well its quite a mood, this is a sincere
offering of heart and devotion.
Quite an outpouring, sweet poetess...
great to see your smiling face here tonite  
take care Dee-girlie
jm

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The words and the music came through
But words and music can never touch
The beauty that I've seen in you

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7 posted 2001-09-11 02:29 AM


NO, you always be YOURSELF and don't let any man make you something that you are not. A wonderful poem, Dee, and I'm so glad to see you posting again.    Now WRITE to me!   I miss you dearly.

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.  

The Rusty Knight
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8 posted 2001-09-11 02:42 AM


Dee,
I like the poem, but agree with Auguste...You must always be yourself or you will resent what someone else has made you.  The key to a long term relationship is two people that love themselves and the other person the way they are.  A key only fits the lock it is made for.  It is always best to find the lock and key that match rather than trying to modify the key to fit the lock.

Death comes not when we cease to breathe, but when we cease to dream.

The Lonely Stranger
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9 posted 2001-09-11 04:26 AM


This is a very nice poem, my only suggestion is regarding the physical structure .....I'm no expert at all, but it seems to me that visual breaks help the reader know how the poem should read.

Just my humble thoughts.

No one ever listened themselves into trouble.

[This message has been edited by The Lonely Stranger (edited 09-11-2001).]

Dee
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10 posted 2001-09-11 05:40 AM


Trillium, thanks for taking the time to read. Things always look better after a little while.  

Janet, the moods get me sometimes and I write what I feel. Glad you dropped by.  
Always like seeing your smiling face on my poems too.

Dee

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Dee
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11 posted 2001-09-11 06:31 AM


Michael, its nice to see your face too.   You know sometimes we just have to make compromises. And I promise I will write again soon.


Dee

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Dee
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12 posted 2001-09-11 06:42 AM


Rusty Knight, I like the way you put that  Thanks for the comments.

Lonely Stranger, thanks. I will play with the set up and see what I come up with.

Dee

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rwood
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13 posted 2001-09-11 07:45 AM


It seems you made a wise decision in this verse. But in heartache you have gone back on it. Let him see you for what you are worth, Priceless! A very lovely rendered piece. Thank you for sharing!

Sincerely,
Regina

Dee
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14 posted 2001-09-11 09:47 AM


Thank you Regina. Your comments mean a lot to me as I enjoy your work immensely.

Dee

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JamesMichael
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15 posted 2001-09-11 03:14 PM


May love be yours...James
Dee
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16 posted 2001-09-11 05:29 PM


Thank you James.   I'm sure it will be.

Dee

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17 posted 2001-09-12 05:43 AM


Ths one flows with honest emotion my friend. Well done I enjoyed the read, take care!

"Let me pierce the realm of glamour
So I know just what I am." ~ Van Morrison


Dee
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18 posted 2001-09-12 05:53 AM


Thanks Eddie, always glad to hear your comments.  

Dee

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vandana
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19 posted 2001-09-12 10:44 AM


goor write
Dee
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20 posted 2001-09-12 06:06 PM


Thanks Vandana.  

Dee

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