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RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

0 posted 2001-09-08 12:17 PM

We amble lone in lives of some success
where whispered doubting moments we're annoyed,
the strong alone reluctantly confess
our imperfection, in our heart's a void.

Psychobabel's modern pleonasm
defines devotion as co-dependant,
unfullfilled in Love, life's just a chasm
well call me lame I'll sing not Love's lament.

Pray let me seek communion through our eyes
and breathe in passion's breath, I don't fear it,
complete, united beings verify
power of two hearts are this world's spirits.

In mix and meld's diversity's our strength
where one may lack the other fortifies
and blessed are they who know such bliss at length,
for never more will this life gratify.

As poetry's blend is passion, order,
so Love is a higher order's passion
let nothing on this earth come before her
nor hoard it's beauty, it's gift's not rationed.

[This message has been edited by RSWells (edited 09-08-2001).]

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2001-09-08 12:23 PM

Well done, Sir, very well done indeed...no critique required....

snowpants
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since 2000-09-16

Posts 2061
KS

2 posted 2001-09-08 12:39 PM

'In mix and meld's diversity's our strength
where one may lack the other fortifies
and blessed are they who know such bliss at length,
for never more will this life gratify.'

Brilliant lines, Richard...very VERY well written...great write!

sp

tried to write a letter
to tell you how I feel,
but all I kept on writing
was slipping on the tears from the day...

snowpants
Member Elite

since 2000-09-16

Posts 2061
KS

3 posted 2001-09-08 12:40 PM

woopsie...forgot the library thang...

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2001-09-08 01:23 AM

We amble lone in lives of some success
where whispered doubting moments we're annoyed,
the strong alone reluctantly confess
our imperfection, in our heart's a void.

Psychobabel's modern pleonasm
defines devotion as co-dependant,
unfullfilled in Love, life's just a chasm
well call me lame I'll sing not Love's lament.
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I do so enjoy your rhymes of divine
cadence kissed and pure poetry
absolutely beautiful Richard

Well I looked to the sky for my anthem
The words and the music came through
But words and music can never touch
The beauty that I've seen in you

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

5 posted 2001-09-09 03:23 AM

Now that was a wonderful, well written piece Richard, and as usual your rhyme and cadence were of perfection. Well done!

*~If you can't say anything nice about someone, don't say anything at all*~
~* My Gramma, Mom and me *~

rwood
Member Elite

since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

6 posted 2001-09-10 06:28 AM

I can only think It will come back to you ten fold! To me, the trying is bliss! This is perfect!

Sincerely,
Regina

It's all in the mind
Except for what's in the heart.

Apachecat906
Member

since 2001-09-04

Posts 217
Michigan, USA

7 posted 2001-09-10 10:36 AM

I think this is beautiful, but Im not sure since it was too far over my head to get a good look.

Anyway, it sounded pretty...I'll be thinking about this for a while.

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

8 posted 2001-09-10 07:30 PM

superbly done. . . indeed, your gift is ours as well. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant

since 2000-07-06

Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

9 posted 2001-09-11 08:16 AM

so many gifts you have brought to Passion's table to share, and this one is as wonderful as all the rest!!

The road goes on forever, and the stories never end...

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