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Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

0 posted 2001-09-07 01:39 PM

Your my Knight in shining armor
With your sword held in your hand
Heading out to battle
To protect and save our land

Before you go, Let me show
How much you mean to me
For I fear each time you leave
Twill be the last I see of thee

Time is short, this I know
The enemies steeds I can hear
Let me kiss each eye
look upon you one more time
Whisper Godspeed into thine ear

Lord, while your away I'll be on my knees
And do nothing but pray
That the soil not thirst
For Your blood on this day

Hours have passed
And the clashing of the swords
Has ceased at last, but from my spot
I'll not move
For I already hear the wooden wheels
on cobble stones, and the tears
full of all my fears to prove

Then come the foot steps approaching
Behind me, I simply cannot breath
For is it you or a messanger
To tell me of your leave

You place your hand gently upon
My shoulder, mine touches yours as
Quickly as it can
I take a breath, A sob escapes
As I place my cheek upon
Your blood soaked hand

Thank You
~~~Connie~~~

[This message has been edited by Zinsser (edited 09-07-2001).]

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2001-09-07 01:43 PM

Nicely told... could easily be one of a series of poems telling a whole story...of love and loss...fear...betrayal..

Nice work... I enjoyed!!

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

2 posted 2001-09-07 01:59 PM

Enjoyed this

Gloom

bslicker

Member Elite

since 2000-12-04

Posts 2321
state of mind

3 posted 2001-09-07 02:27 PM

oh I really liked this.
Library it goes.
Do have to ask though on the last verse did you mean to type the first line.
"You place you hand gently upon"

I like a lot of your writes.

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

MARK V SHELDON
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...

4 posted 2001-09-07 02:33 PM

A timeless period piece and a nice cinematic scene.

-MVS

"It's all in the details -- the Big Picture always takes care of itself."
-MVS

Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

5 posted 2001-09-07 04:14 PM

Ron: Thank You very much.... this is my first try at something like this so a "Series" LOL way too scarey

Gloom: Thanks... glad you enjoyed

bslicker: You can see that I fixed the you- your thing LOL Thank You for your praise of this piece and others

Mark: Thank You for your words... I hope I caught the time right.... your good at that in your work

Thank You
~~~Connie~~~

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2001-09-07 06:05 PM

Don't understand the title but I really enjoyed the poem...James

Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

7 posted 2001-09-07 06:54 PM

James: Soil Please do not thirst for the blood of my Knight in the battle field this day
Glad You enjoyed the write : )
~Connie~

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

8 posted 2001-09-08 11:43 AM

you've always got me when you talk about Knights. . .

wonderful job. . .

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Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

9 posted 2001-09-08 12:40 PM

Sven... Thanks : )

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