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RMW
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0 posted 2001-09-07 01:18 PM


Plato's Cottage

We needed this; the look of stone.
Had approval or reproach,
In the form of either a light in the window
Or a bristly mat, you know the kind
Used for scraping the beach soil off
From our soles,
Met us as we came along the walk,
Truth would have collapsed
As suddenly as the house, of which Christ spoke,
Built on sand.
The scene immediately became awkward.
Our baggage seemed to multiply in numbers
Contesting our presence on the porch
With the type of arguments
Right-angled logic makes.
I searched my pockets
Until the contents overflowed into your hands;
The key to my house, my car, my office,
A loved-one's safe deposit box,
A tiny pen-light (utterly useless
For finding your way,
Though once it illuminated a contact lens
While searching for a beam lodged behind it).
My thoughts ran home, and in that second,
As my mind filled up with rummage
I'd forgotten,
You gave me back so much and more,
As silently
You tried the door.

RMW

[This message has been edited by RMW (edited 09-07-2001).]

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Lady In White
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1 posted 2001-09-07 01:20 PM


quote:
Our baggage seemed to multiply in numbers...

I searched my pockets
Until the contents overflowed...

The key to my house, my car, my office,
...
A tiny pen-light (utterly useless
For finding your way,
Though once it illuminated a contact lens
While searching for a beam lodged behind it).



You are amazing.

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2 posted 2001-09-07 01:30 PM


I do agree.... amazing.....

have read this now 4 times....and each time I find another nuance to appreciate....

good Stuff Sir... hats off to you!!!

RMW
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3 posted 2001-09-07 01:33 PM


Smiles. The two of your are always so quick to make me feel good. Thank you.
Enchantress
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4 posted 2001-09-07 02:01 PM


Excellent write!  Enjoyed immensely.

~Time has cast a spell on you
  so you won't ever forget me~

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5 posted 2001-09-07 02:08 PM


Bob - I really like the flow of this poem.  I can see the house (or one similar, heh), and the way things must have slowed to a crawl while you stood there.  Great writing.
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6 posted 2001-09-07 04:21 PM


Bob--I have read this three times..each time I am caught up with an intricate play of emotion that I can't quite explain.  I like this very much!  
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7 posted 2001-09-07 06:27 PM


Same thoughts as the others, this deserves several reads, and there are many ideas within it.
Sandra

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8 posted 2001-09-07 06:33 PM


This one will haunt me......I will have to keep finding it one more time......

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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