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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2001-09-06 02:45 PM


You lied to her, you lied to me
the truth now known, I'm finally free.
What's this I find, almost a year!
No more lies, I will not hear.
I thought I found love with you,
but now I KNOW it was NEVER true.
Baby I've got my wings, I can not lie
so here I am, to tell you goodbye.
I hope your happy when you see the man in the glass
but as far as I'm concerned~
You can kiss my _ _ _ _!!

(venting stuff......grrr)

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

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JamesMichael
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1 posted 2001-09-06 02:50 PM


Aha that temptation to write those words...James
1slick_lady
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2 posted 2001-09-06 02:51 PM


that's right...you tell 'em...vent all you want...helen
Decaflame
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3 posted 2001-09-06 02:54 PM



Vent.  Vent.  Now, vent some more!  
Once you're done, show him the door!  


LngJhnAg
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4 posted 2001-09-06 03:01 PM


Spirited One - Perhaps you should give him a second chance.  Whatta ya think?  That other woman probably meant nothing to him.  Go ahead, he won't think less of you if you beg him to come back.  heh

BTW - We men are NOT all alike.  I only wish for womankind's sake that every man could be more like me.  Wouldn't this be a different world? *unsuspecting eyes*

I do like your poem.  It is filled with some really good expressions of emotion, and closure.  I hope you find peace and real love.

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just out of reach
5 posted 2001-09-06 04:52 PM


You Go Girl !!!

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

The Rusty Knight
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6 posted 2001-09-06 05:23 PM


I hope I never make you mad Gentle...I could see the fire in your eyes....Romantics fall harder than most people, but they are usually able to get up and try again.

Death comes not when we cease to breathe, but when we cease to dream.

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7 posted 2001-09-06 05:52 PM


ouch!   this packs a punch! Great writing.   and yes, the romantics fall hard, but we always try again, don't we ?!  

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Gentle Spirit
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8 posted 2001-09-06 09:16 PM


Oh I'm sorry everyone, I'm just venting.  I'm frustrated, aggravated, and very much so disapointed in myself as much as in him.  Thanks for all the lovely comments, and Rusty, it takes alot to make me mad, I'm sure you never will......after all.....you are from Texas!  (one of my favorite people places.  *s*)

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

Spine Grinder
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9 posted 2001-09-10 06:39 PM


wow, in this poem, u diffently didnt have a GENTLE  spirit...lol...nice job neways...

And I'd... give it all away
Just to have somewhere to go to...
Give it all away...
To have someone to come home to ...~Linkin Park

shadow974
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10 posted 2001-09-10 06:56 PM


Go for it!!! Find someone deserving.

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.
ARAB PROVERB

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