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RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

0 posted 2001-09-06 12:24 PM

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It needs a cottage to confess
Love or sin.
A quiet place where rough, gray stone
Confronts the unrelenting sound of the ocean
With shutters open to the sun
And the mercy of a smooth horizon.
It warms to corner in a room
A rocking chair whose slender wood
Imprisons gracefully the back
With stripes between
As if to say
Forget me not.
It strains to long beneath the weight
Of cirrus accumulating
Throughout the afternoon.
It wants, at last, the knock of dark,
The length of birch with black-robed parts
That stare, like jurists, from the hearth
Then quickly whisper back and forth
While two friends close upon a couch
Await the verdict.

RMW

[This message has been edited by RMW (edited 09-06-2001).]

Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

1 posted 2001-09-06 01:44 PM

It certainly wants all this...I've read it three times, and the images only expanded to take me in....

well done Sir...

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

2 posted 2001-09-06 03:56 PM

Bob:

You paint the perfect scene..and my heart screams that the two would talk of love, but you are so clever in your thinking, to put an edge on it, with sin. Great writing!!

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

3 posted 2001-09-06 08:11 PM

Done masterfully, Bob, always with the most haunting of elemental style.

Peace.

Cor

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

4 posted 2001-09-06 09:25 PM

great job Bob. . . you do have that most unique way of seeing things. . .

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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

5 posted 2001-09-07 08:31 AM

another for me to savor... you my friend are indeed an artist. The images painted always fascinate me..always make me wish I could do what you do with so few words...

a pleasure..always

RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

6 posted 2001-09-07 10:45 AM

Thanks, folks. Bob

rwood
Member Elite

since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

7 posted 2001-09-07 08:12 PM

Beautifully written. An english cottage setting. A getaway. I could see the spark but could also feel the awkward pose of the couple. Wonderful imagery.

Sincerely,
Regina

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