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She Writes .... a bookend for Lady In White's "He Writes..."
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She Writes .... a bookend for Lady In White's "He Writes..." |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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 She Writes closeted amid sachets of lavender silk lay a box clasped, latched against eyes he was bereft, her soul he sought to seek so carefully he lifted, and then prized her coffer open, finding papers by her hand slowly he began to read, as, by her verse she spoke not of love but matters grand all wrapped in curlicues, poetry immersed she wrote of art, artists, musicians and lore of nature, beasts, birds, and grand shores though and through her lines he came to find she wrote most her thoughts of mind she penned that of what she was not but sought to find her soul’s desire in giving beauty to that which was wrought from within her internal heart of fire for in her was to cast upon waters, bread to walk in humbleness beside her mate to thank God duly, and in His stead realize that all craft their daily fate O yes, it was a dream that she cast about trying to depict invisible in her lines she would let men write of historical touts while she penned gentleness, refined she ached, aspired to transport souls to harbors of lightness, greatness and cheer obliterating desolation, her goal her poetry was this, her intent so clear she, who penned thoughts so fine knew others more gifted, poetically so she had tied up her sheaves in twine and laid them down aesthetically now he found them after her depart and ached aloud, her intent decreed she had always spoken from her heart her love of mankind, for one to read [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 09-06-2001).] |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
This is beautiful Sunshine. Great tribute. alan |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Sunshine, this is a perfect companion to Lady's poem  and I do mean perfect "Deputy Moderator ~ Open Forum" |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Yanno, Sunshine - This was really effective at reaching in and touching my heart. I think I'll reread it if you don't mind. I'm starting to blubber like an old seadog. [This message has been edited by LngJhnAg (edited 09-06-2001).] |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Beautiful ...beautiful done. love it!! Charisma |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
This is an EXCELLENT keepsake for me to read in the many days ahead it's soooo beautifully written and I thank you Sunshine for sharing this jewel of a poem... Hugs2uPoetFriend *~coco~* [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 09-06-2001).] |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Magnificent. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ A lovely *gift* is shared~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
though and through her lines he came to find she wrote most her thoughts of mind she penned that of what she was not but sought to find her soul’s desire in giving beauty to that which was wrought from within her internal heart of fire ============================== O yes, it was a dream that she cast about trying to depict invisible in her lines she would let men write of historical touts while she penned gentleness, refined she ached, aspired to transport souls to harbors of lightness, greatness and cheer obliterating desolation, her goal her poetry was this, her intent so clear she, who penned thoughts so fine knew others more gifted, poetically so she had tied up her sheaves in twine and laid them down aesthetically now he found them after her depart and ached aloud, her intent decreed she had always spoken from her heart her love of mankind, for one to read ====================================== You know Im smiling ..right? You know I'm taking this one too, right?  Listen for the click.... tis the sound of another poem going in the treasure chest. Outstanding write Sun...truly jm |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sunshine: How many ways to touch the heart, you have found more I think then I knew I had. Your poetry sings! |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Karilea - You are right - this is a perfect complement to Lady's poem - beautifully done and absolutly true to form. Your poem and hers reinforce my belief that women are the most amazing, wonderful creatures. |
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The Rusty Knight Member
since 2001-08-29
Posts 414Texas |
I Loooooove the whole poem, but the last line stole my heart....be gentle with it. Death comes not when we cease to breathe, but when we cease to dream. |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
she ached, aspired to transport souls to harbors of lightness, greatness and cheer obliterating desolation, her goal her poetry was this, her intent so clear .... she had always spoken from her heart her love of mankind, for one to read -------------- Oh...lovely and so eloquently expressed The last two lines are so particularly impressive... thank you **************************** |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
wonderfully done my friend. . . indeed both should be treasured by all here. . . superb. . . ---------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
How stunningly beautiful. I can't say anything else If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nice companion piece... very nicely crafted... as usual... I enjoyed! |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Quite worth a second read Karilea ... comes with its' own gentle smile and leaves us with a wisp of fascination |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
You've surely given Lady in White a run for her money with this gem, Sunshine...  |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
wow, you two do make a pair, writer's extraordiare, the both of you...enjoyed this much.......and lol@your nick sunshine, it sure does fit you |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
"obliterating desolation, her goal her poetry was this, her intent so clear" and...the last two lines said it all! Well Sunshine, you and Lady make a fine pair of bookends indeed! You know I am smiling from ear to ear I bet, and put it where it belonged. *~If you can't say anything nice about someone, don't say anything at all*~ |
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