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Like Sand
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Like Sand |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Like sand through my life's fingers, You sifted to new ground... Like land, mirage still lingers, Though you're not to be found... An hourglass eternal Turned over on its end And our glass -- a journal To toast us and pretend My eyes no longer stinging From lies into them blown Surprise no longer clinging To grains of Truth now known My heart's once fertile soil Now arid, barren land A cart's fruit left to spoil And dry away like sand... (Copyright 2001 by: MARK V SHELDON) "It's all in the details -- the Big Picture always takes care of itself." |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Wow! Mark , very cleverly woven. A sad piece so artfully done. Really enjoyed the weave. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh Mark!! You have done yourself proud with this one. I just love it!! Excellent write my friend. ~Time has cast a spell on you |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Sometimes we skip across a line or two, or more, that carries us to new shores... well done Sir.... |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Thank you, Virginia -- woven like the lies this inspired. Enchantress, your reply does me proud. Thank you for the nice words. My Lady -- that goes to show that the only things made for skipping are stones, feet, and chemistry classes... Thanks for the thoughts. -MVS "It's all in the details -- the Big Picture always takes care of itself." |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Nicely metaphored! Corinne |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Life, that bully who kicks sand in our faces. But we learn...we learn. |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Oh, this is intricately webbed in truth and pain. Lies are poison. Vicious and vile. Very well done. I could see the fruit dry up, then nothing. The sand added the perfect texture of gritty devoid. Loved it! Sincerely, Regina |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hey Mark, I hope this a poetic exercise, and you are not feeling as sad as this poem. Very good one, I like this style from you. Sandra |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
clever employ of metaphor and theme here... I liked the way you carried out the sand/time theme with the imagery for impact...wrapping it up in rhyme divine. I always enjoy your rhymes. very well done poet Mark  A man who asks a woman to lie for him, is a man who will lie to that woman. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Corinne, thank you. Richard: hopefully, we learn -- hopefully... Regina, lies are all that and more (a RIPE topic, come to think of it, for a poem...). The image seemed to work for the ideas I wanted to express... thanks for the sentiments. Sandra, this was triggered by an exercise but was inspired by obvious things from the past. Not to worry -- I was simply "time traveling", if you will, back to the space and place of concentrated hurt, for such places serve as endless inspirational sources, as you know... I appreciate your concern though. Thank you, JM -- this one was one of my most "weaved" works yet. -MVS "It's all in the details -- the Big Picture always takes care of itself." |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
Beautiful!!!!! ~Connie~ |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
*Excellent penned*! Charisma |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Thank you to you both, Connie and Charisma. -MVS "It's all in the details -- the Big Picture always takes care of itself." |
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