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He Writes - dedicated to all poets here.... |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
 He Writes she eavesdropped past his poetry envisioned the man beyond his time perceived his whisperings as he spoke of sounds that tolled his chime of his daydream, she felt him deep he, never knowing of her hold as in her wake, or in her sleep she gently cupped his words of gold oh spells he cast, enchantment spread she heard his mind through his touch of ink to parchment or by pencil lead and drew envisioned dreams and such reading through words of quiet calm she danced alight his sequins of sound for they beheld her required balm and wrapped, enrapt, them all around O mellifluous, then softer still coursed his heartstrung words to her by tick of time he lined her thrill as if he knew, and loved her pure by time’s reality, his candle bright would diminish dim, to dark surrender truth seized close by her finest light of heart’s rote evoked his splendor she eavesdropped past his poetry oh spells he cast, enchantment spread O mellifluous, then softer still, she laid back the coverlets for their bed of his daydream, she felt him deep reading through words of quiet calm and pulls his spirit to her in sleep as his words rest in her palm [This message has been edited by Lady In White (edited 09-05-2001).] |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Very nice, my Lady. You catch a wave of subtle ether with this one and have the mind follow the wafting rhythm of an honest heart. -MVS "It's all in the details -- the Big Picture always takes care of itself." |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
However subtle or metaphorical our words are, we will in sheer volumne know each other eventually, for true poetry is truth indeed. Well written. [This message has been edited by RSWells (edited 09-05-2001).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nicely said... many touch us with word and never know... I enjoyed... |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Very nice indeed - What lies beyond the surface of the dream... is said between the lines... I like it my Lady friend..  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
she eavesdropped past his poetry envisioned the man beyond his time perceived his whisperings as he spoke of sounds that tolled his chime of his daydream, she felt him deep he, never knowing of her hold as in her wake, or in her sleep she gently cupped his words of gold oh spells he cast, enchantment spread she heard his mind through his touch of ink to parchment or by pencil lead and drew envisioned dreams and such =============================== for they beheld her required balm and wrapped, enrapt, them all around O mellifluous, then softer still coursed his heartstrung words to her by tick of time he lined her thrill as if he knew, and loved her pure ===================================== of his daydream, she felt him deep reading through words of quiet calm and pulls his spirit to her in sleep as his words rest in her palm ========================================= Oh My Lady...time and time again... you pen my heart.... What a lovely moment of inspire this is... what an impressive level of inspire this is...the rhyme, the vocab & language, the poetic phrasing...and the soulful intend of the emotions............ You have enchantingly encompassed the gifting of poetry...when we are touched, taught, captivated and drawn to another poets words. For it is there in their verses of vision we may see our own reflection, For it is in their heartlight that we grow. This cadence kissed beauty from your pen is a perfect example of what Im fumbling to say here... what I really want to say is... IWISHIHADWROTETHIS~  Once again my lady... Im taking this one for my own...tis a "treasure chest" keeper.... and you KNOW what that means.  [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 09-05-2001).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LadyInWhite~ I think perhaps this is one of your finest pieces written to date~ It is a keeper~ Enjoyed it so~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
LadyInWhite~ This is marvelous, this is a masterpiece and I agree that this is your best by far  You've touched this poet's heart Into my library this goes~Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
This is so so lovely, what joy for one to learn that maybe, just maybe joy might lie in the palm of a reader's hands. Wonderful image. Thanks for posting this one, Lady! It's tender and romantic but wonderfully touching. In fact it is inspiring a poem in my mind. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
wow, this is so wonderful, poetry has such power, and it can be used almost as a 'pickup line' if misused, but most poets I know are true of heart... and I love this because it almost glamorizes the reader as well as the poet.....for both are important for the art to be appreciated |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lady: Janet Marie said it and I repeat it, I wish I wrote this..it's wonderfully done!! Bravo to you and poetry!! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Lady, this is exquisite in it's beauty. Such a talent you have with words, and we have been blessed to share in that talent. Thank you dear lady. On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice...James |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Lady love, utterly utterly fabulous, Margie girl is write this is one of your best. He writes, and she writes beautifully. The flow of this is as smooth as music flows in a symphony, each note, each word flowing into a whole melody. Beautiful writing utterly outstanding work. love and warm stuff as always Puck   Take back the hope you gave,- I claim |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Inspiring! *smiles* ~Tier |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Simply beautiful |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well I simply sighed, and smiled being wrapped in these beautiful words. JM said it all and I only wish I could write this way once. I now believe this is the nicest piece of poetry you have done, and into the library it goes with a "thank you"! *~If you can't say anything nice about someone, don't say anything at all*~ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Wonderful Poem! The theme is fantastic, and the poetry, exquisite This was such a delight to read A well crafted piece Liz |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
every single word is perfect. "Deputy Moderator ~ Open Forum" |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
on behalf of all of us. . . thank you. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lady In White, I must agree with all of the above. To me this is truely an epopee. I am humbled by its eligance. One of your finest. *L* |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'oh spells he cast, enchantment spread she heard his mind through his touch of ink to parchment or by pencil lead and drew envisioned dreams and such reading through words of quiet calm she danced alight his sequins of sound for they beheld her required balm and wrapped, enrapt, them all around' Everything about this is perfect...the rhyme and flow are flawless, and the images are simply fantastic! To sum it all up...beautiful, beautiful write... sp  tried to write a letter |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
You wrote a hit here sweet Lady in White Titia  A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
she eavesdropped past his poetry oh spells he cast, enchantment spread O mellifluous, then softer still, she laid back the coverlets for their bed of his daydream, she felt him deep reading through words of quiet calm and pulls his spirit to her in sleep as his words rest in her palm wow, have you got that right..... excellent peek into my heart for a poet. May your dreams always dance to the rhythm of a lover's heartbeat... |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
What a beautiful light you have cast. Following every word like a spirit going home. I so loved this. Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece of your heart. Sincerely, Regina |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Mind if I come back and gloat I do so love when my fellow poets prove my point ... see...ya dont have to take my word for it *L*  20 plus Pip-ers cant be wrong  Am I biased...(a tad)  does the poem rock ... Yeppers |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
I agree with JM..........this poem rocks.......I loved every line. up to my library Charisma |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Vaer special writing, Lady, I think our most loved male poets here make us all have these feelings at times. Their words are treasures..As are the womens'. Sandra |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
He watched her read in silence, by the light of candle flame Consumed by words, which filled each line till end Entranced by all the stories, born of love and often pain The poems, which through a lifetime he had penned ------------------- A lovely write dear Lady, I enjoyed your penned masterpiece. Rick |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
When I penned this, I had no idea it would touch so many poets, You, and You, and You, who have made Passions the home that it is...I had hoped a few would read, but You all have exceeded those expectations... so to all of you, my humble thanks for allowing these words to sink past the recess of your eyes, and on to your hearts. They were more than comments, you know...they were the glorious, silken ties that bind one poet to another.... I will read You...Poet... LiW |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Lady - This was very well written - I especially like the way reading it made me slow down to the rhythm of the poem, rather than allowing me to make the poem conform to my pace. I wonder if the other poets got that sense of flow out of it too? As for the sentiments - well, what could I possibly add that could improve upon the words you've already read? Simply lovely. |
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