An Uneasy Silence Fills the Room

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deleeme
Senior Member

since 1999-10-09

Posts 1766
NEW ENGLAND, USA

0 posted 2001-09-04 11:14 PM

An uneasy silence fills the room!

Where is all the usual noise
of nervous small talk
  of the shuffle of feet
   or a little giggle
    at an unfunny joke
     or the sound of heavy breathing
      coming from the lovers
       entwined on the couch?

I thought this was a party!

Did I not get an invitation?
Was I not promised an atmosphere
  of levity and bottled spirits
   to help break the ice
    and really get things going?

I know this ain't the wrong address!

But instead all I find
is the erie silence of my thoughts
  screaming at me,with no volume at all
   in a vacated but once bustling apartment
    which used to be brimming of life and action
     and maybe was even too noisy
      to suit the neighbors
       but which felt audibly good anyway
        for at least then
         there was a sembelance of life
          something we could recognize
           and be involved in.

Oh drat this sense of loss and loosing!

Even if it was not so important
nor outrageously meaningful
  even if it did not make of me a better person
   or make my head feel good the morning after--
    At least, there was SOME feeling present
     at least I didn't have to imagine
      how it might have been--
       for then it was
        and for what it was
         and made it's presence known
          Visually and Audibly
           and touched the senses
            and presented external stimuli
             something to react to
              or reason to initiate
               and resonate and instigate
                and celebrate----

But the evidence is sadly clear!

Not now-- of the party that didn't happen
Silence has screamed out, "It's Over!"
  Not to the ears, but the recesses of the heart
   striking deeper than a dagger
    moving me to solitarty sorrow.

Do I even bother turning out the lights
     on my way out, into the unusally
         noisy street???????????????

Nathan James Nugent
Junior Member

since 2001-08-31

Posts 10

1 posted 2001-09-04 11:18 PM

I really dig the way your thoughts lay out, even after the first few lines I felt as if i've been in a similar frame of mind- alone amidst chaos.

doreen peri
Member Elite

since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

2 posted 2001-09-04 11:23 PM

i said something similar in the feelings forum recently but you said it much better and clearer in verse... though my thoughts might have nothing to do with your poem...

anyway...really powerfully spoken lines with lots of emotion here...

very well done.....

Trillium

Member Patricius

since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

3 posted 2001-09-05 12:49 PM

David: This speaks of loss very eloquently.
Thanks for alerting me to come and read it.

Betty Lou Hebert

ellie LeJeune
Member Elite

since 2000-01-10

Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA

4 posted 2001-09-05 06:11 AM

David; this so excellent! You have expressed so well the feelings and the atmosphere! Wonderful free verse as well, sad but true, change is always guarenteed! Love, Ellie

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

5 posted 2001-09-05 07:10 AM

This is SO well written. I really like it. It expresses the emotion very very well

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

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