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Martie
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0 posted 2001-09-04 09:44 PM


Tell me a Poem

Tell me a poem, he said
as they sat on the front porch
watching the sun slowly sink.

She smiled at his sun warm face.
A poem about what? She said.

About you,
about the way the rain smells,
anything.
You tell some, then I’ll tell some.

They were tipsy with the sunset and wine
and each other,

And thus this poem:  

In a desert
the heart can fly,
gathering liquid
from the stars at night.
The nourishment of day
comes from courage of cactus’s
adaptability forte.

If the heart looks closer,
sand and rock strewn path
are footprints big and frail,
the waving swirl of snake
and the tiny lizard’s tail.
Even death’s bones
leak their brittle scar
on the path if you look
with your heart.

But, should you lose your heart
on some forgotten road,
give it away to another’s creed
that stopped and left its imprint
on your pathway with some need,
then the desert will be hot
for quenched thirst cannot be bought.

Understand that the other heart
does not belong to you
anymore then the cactus
belongs to dew.


They laughed into each other and the night.
  
The End but the beginning.

[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 09-04-2001).]

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Zinsser
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1 posted 2001-09-04 10:02 PM


Oh How I love this write...
All my favorite things in it  
Thank You for this ... it brought a smile to my face today......
~Connie~

Honeybee
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2 posted 2001-09-04 10:06 PM


Martie, I just adore the way you write!  

Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

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3 posted 2001-09-04 10:43 PM


Martie~
This is soooooooooooooooooooooooo pretty~

'But, should you lose your heart
on some forgotten road,
give it away to another’s creed
that stopped and left its imprint
on your pathway with some need,
then the desert will be hot
for quenched thirst cannot be bought.

Understand that the other heart
does not belong to you
anymore then the cactus
belongs to dew.


They laughed into each other and the night.'


I just sit here sighing at the beauty of your thoughts.
I'm so glad you're a poet !  

This one nudges the 'other' favorites over
to make room on the shelf~

*Hugs* sweet sister of penned heart~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
                                   noles1@totcon.com            

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4 posted 2001-09-04 10:55 PM


A poem within a poem...I like the way you did it.

Death comes not when we cease to breathe, but when we cease to dream.

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5 posted 2001-09-04 10:56 PM


You ARE a poem, my friend, and a very nice one at that.   (((hugs)))

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.  

doreen peri
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6 posted 2001-09-04 11:43 PM


there is no end in true beginnings
cast in light, on desert sand...
lizard skins protect the winnings
not collected, understand...
porch swings wait for hands relate
in touch of wonder and of hope...
poems come and verses go
while balancing on high tightrope

when beginnings meet horizons,
apex of the truth soon shown,
sunsets turn to sunrise dawns
above the deserts you have known....

Martie
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7 posted 2001-09-05 12:11 PM


Connie--Favorite things and a smile...I am smiling now..thanks.

Melissa--Thank you so much for your sweet words.

Marge--The shelf of you hold me up...thanks.

Rusty--I'm glad you liked!

Michael--And YOU are a friend...and a very nice one at that...Hugs!

Doreen--"There is no end in ture beginnings"
Loved this...thanks.

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8 posted 2001-09-05 12:18 PM


*shaking me head...again*

this is cooler than I have words for...
encore.. more.. more  
me

Logan
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9 posted 2001-09-05 12:59 PM


Ahh, he asked for a poem, and received a masterpiece..very well done, Martie, it has all the elements as only you can do...very gentle smile
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10 posted 2001-09-05 01:08 AM


Ahhhh (that is all I can come up with as it makes me smile all fuzzy and warm inside)

*~If you can't say anything nice about someone, don't say anything at all*~
~* My Gramma, Mom and me *~

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11 posted 2001-09-05 01:25 AM



Martie-
   Oh my...this is gorgeous!
   Nobody...I mean, NOBODY, tells a poem like you!

       "But, should you lose your heart
       on some forgotten road,
       give it away to another’s creed
       that stopped and left its imprint
       on your pathway with some need,
       then the desert will be hot
       for quenched thirst cannot be bought."

       "They laughed into each other and the night."


   Just beautiful!
   Hugs,
   ~vicky

  

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



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12 posted 2001-09-05 08:46 AM



Two poems for the price of one click...you're circling, Martie, and poems are spinning in your wake...

well done!

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13 posted 2001-09-09 07:26 PM


Martie~
This is one of the nicest poems I've read in a long while. Worth another trip around.
Enjoy how you tell of a memory.


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
                                   noles1@totcon.com              

[This message has been edited by Marge Tindal (edited 09-09-2001).]

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14 posted 2001-09-09 08:04 PM


They laughed into each other and the night.
  
The End but the beginning.

Oh I love this sooo much!! Simply lovely!

~Time has cast a spell on you
  so you won't ever forget me~

shadow974
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15 posted 2001-09-09 08:49 PM


When you find your oasis relax, enjoy, quinch your thirst for love. Beautiful poem Martie.

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.
ARAB PROVERB

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