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arthur
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since 2001-08-14
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england

0 posted 2001-09-04 06:57 PM


this poem has been in critical where it has ( perhaps justifiably) been ignored .Only dear echantress has given it a look .So perhaps here::?

STRESS

Do not shout or i will break
In little pieces on the floor
Peace , for my own hearts sake
Or let me be no more

I can feel the trembling
Running across my brow
Let me cease dissembling
Destroy me now

My hands shake
Could I but sleep
For ever and ever awake
O, let me sleep

Let me cease to be
Give me peace
let my eyes no longer see
Give me peace

arthur

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Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
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Canada eh.
1 posted 2001-09-04 07:05 PM


I most definitely do like this one Arthur, and can feel the depths of your dispair. Well done indeed.

~Time has cast a spell on you
so you won't ever forget me~

[This message has been edited by Enchantress (edited 09-04-2001).]

The Rusty Knight
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since 2001-08-29
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2 posted 2001-09-04 07:27 PM


Arthur,

Comments on poems about dispair seem to be harder to come by than others...you captured it well.

Give me peace
let my eyes no longer see
Give me peace
  I like this part...

Death comes not when we cease to breathe, but when we cease to dream.

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3 posted 2001-09-04 07:33 PM


Arthur - I would never shout, but only whisper. Well done.

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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