»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #15
»
Passing Vision
| Open Poetry #15 |
|
Passing Vision |
|
|
Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada 
|
She appeared one night as a passing vision, And brought her love for all to see. The fine features that drew my attention Became more beautiful with every glance. Her smile, as though it were drawn from my subconscious By an artist in my dreams. Her eyes, as warm as a loving touch When needed most. Her skin, as soft and smooth As a breath upon your cheek; I was captivated. Though I knew it could never be, I dared to dream. Laid credence to possibilities And ached for something That was never really there. Like the thin wisp of smoke That remembers the bright flame From moments ago, She was gone. She appeared one night as a passing vision, And left her beauty within my soul. A place no one else can reach. |
||
| © Copyright 2001 Trevor Watson - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sigh...its so good to see you here...and this is so hauntingly beautiful...nice picture too cowboy  |
||
|
Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
"Like the thin wisp of smoke That remembers the bright flame From moments ago," And you have captured the wisp as if it were a heartbeat held, impossibly . . . Liked this piece, Trew . . . her eyes, her smile . . . |
||
|
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Though I knew it could never be, I dared to dream. Laid credence to possibilities And ached for something That was never really there. Like the thin wisp of smoke That remembers the bright flame From moments ago, She was gone. She appeared one night as a passing vision, And left her beauty within my soul. A place no one else can reach. ================================= this is lovely..written with depth, so that the reader feels the ache and the sincerity of your words. well done Poet Trew... good to see your name here again. jm A man who asks a woman to lie for him, is a man who will lie to that woman. |
||
|
Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Paula - Thank you. It's nice to be back and it's nice to see familiar faces too. Sure is busy around here these days! Glad you liked the poem. Krawdad - It was the only way to describe the moment. *sigh* Quite a poetic reply! Thanks for making time for me. JM - Ache and sincerity are definitely appropriate descriptors. Thanks so much for the welcome back and taking the time to reply. Trev. |
||
Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Trew~ 'She appeared one night as a passing vision, And left her beauty within my soul. A place no one else can reach.' Sometimes someone touches us in a way that etches their memory on us forever~ This is a tenderly written encounter~ Nice to see you, Trew~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
||
|
snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'She appeared one night as a passing vision, And brought her love for all to see. The fine features that drew my attention Became more beautiful with every glance. Her smile, as though it were drawn from my subconscious By an artist in my dreams. Her eyes, as warm as a loving touch When needed most.' Beautiful write, Trew...I really liked it...it is good to see you around here again! sp  tried to write a letter |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
