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Corinne
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0 posted 2001-09-03 10:18 PM



Roll On

I tried to think of a way
to express my compassion
for the living,
shy of one more Hallmark card
or wreath of dead flowers,
without having to attend
your services.

Everyone else was there,
including the escort you requested;
an impressive sight -
twelve women on Harleys
at eleven o’clock
on a Friday morning.
No one wore black,
again, your wish,
instead, periwinkle dominated;
I thought of a suffused summer sea,
from my hiding place
across the street.

Ours was an odd friendship
of opposites,
making the loss all the more acute.
There was no one else like you,
there will be no one else like you
for me.

I’m no good at funerals,
but I believe
you’ve forgiven me
because
from behind my tree,
I saw you turn,
wink,
and fade into the crowd.

© 2001 Corinne Bailey

© Copyright 2001 Corinne - All Rights Reserved
Krawdad
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1 posted 2001-09-03 10:34 PM


Very interesting, C.  Looking forward to more of this story . . .
Marge Tindal
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2 posted 2001-09-03 11:05 PM


Oh, Corinne~
Just too cool.
Poignant, sensitive and understood.

'Ours was an odd friendship
of opposites,
making the loss all the more acute.
There was no one else like you,
there will be no one else like you
for me.'


When someone leaves that much of an impression on you ...
at least you deserve that 'wink'~

*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Corinne
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3 posted 2001-09-03 11:28 PM


Thanks, Krawdad. I'm not sure I can say more about this, we'll have to see...

Thank you, sweet Marge, you are a wise woman!

Cor

ramrog
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4 posted 2001-09-04 12:03 PM


well done.  Enjoyed the read.
Martie
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5 posted 2001-09-04 12:15 PM


Corinne--With just a few words you gave your friend a personality, and the wink seems very appropriate and real.
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6 posted 2001-09-04 02:53 PM



Corinne, you always write so very impressively, but there are times, such as this, that you write just a tad better than impressive...

and roll on to remarkable!

JamesMichael
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7 posted 2001-09-04 04:01 PM


Yes roll on...James
Corinne
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8 posted 2001-09-04 07:28 PM


Thank you, Ramrog, Martie, Lady in White, and James Michael.

Corinne

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9 posted 2001-09-05 07:34 PM


again, your unique sight has shown us something that we might have missed. . .

great job. . .  

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Logan
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10 posted 2001-09-05 07:44 PM


I don't like them either. Very well done, my dear friend...very gentle smile
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11 posted 2001-09-05 08:31 PM


enjoy
Nan
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12 posted 2001-09-06 08:21 AM


You're right - a funeral isn't necessarily where you say your 'good-bye' - it's much more private than that..

Your words ring true as always, Corinne..

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13 posted 2001-09-06 12:29 PM


Corinne - You see things so well!  I can only imagine your response to the 'wink' - Could it have been, "Darlin', if you only knew."?  As you can see, I doubt that I will ever forget that line.  You are simply wonderful at doing that.
Corinne
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14 posted 2001-09-06 08:03 PM


Thank you, Sven, Logan, Veranda, Nan!

LgnJhn, you are somethin', you know that?

Corinne

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