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Alan
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0 posted 2001-09-01 09:37 AM



As I look at the picture you sent me
I get lost in what my mind sees
For once my heart is at rest

What I see is empty and void
Which makes me a little annoyed
But at least my heart is at rest

On the horizon I see storm clouds
I love the lightning if the thunder is not too loud
The rain helps hide the pain and tears

The waters look like it will be a little rough
Which will make today a little tough
But that is ok of heartache I have no fears

In the solemn stillness of the night
Under vague shimmering of starlight
My mind will find peace my heart shall rest

As I hear the gentle lapping of the waves
Brightens even the darkest of my minds caves
Bringing to light the feeling that life is best

So as I once again turn and walk to the light
The darkness and fears take flight for at least one night
Though in the distance I can hear the familiar rumbles

Making me realize that as long as I live
I have to take what life chooses to give
Holding on to the hope that my life doesn’t crumble

But for now I look at the picture you sent me
I get lost in what my mind sees
For once my heart is at rest

alan aka Icyheart
Sept.01 2001

I owe this to a seascape picture my daughter sent me

© Copyright 2001 Alan - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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1 posted 2001-09-01 09:44 AM


Beautiful alan, and thank you for sharing your treasure with us, as well as the gift of your verse. Enjoyed.  
Alan
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2 posted 2001-09-01 09:47 AM


Thank you sweet lady, but I don't know about it being a treasure
alan

Tracey
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3 posted 2001-09-01 09:57 AM


And the picture that you paint for us in this poem - thoughtful, contemplative - wonderful.

Brightens even the darkest of my minds caves

I so enjoyed it

Tracey

Alan
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4 posted 2001-09-01 10:13 AM


Thank you Tracey.
Titia Geertman
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5 posted 2001-09-01 12:35 PM


WOW Alan, and you thought your muse had left you? She's right there sweety for this is such a hearttouching poem.

Keep on writing them, I sure love it.

Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Feel free to use the pictures on my website. http://communities.msn.com/Titiasplace/

walker
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6 posted 2001-09-01 08:18 PM


I like this one, very nice. Thanks for sharing.
Alan
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7 posted 2001-09-01 08:35 PM


Thank you Titia ..I am glad you liked it.
Walker...thank you for your kind words
alan

Dee
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8 posted 2001-09-01 08:41 PM


On the horizon I see storm clouds
I love the lightning if the thunder is not too loud

In the solemn stillness of the night
Under vague shimmering of starlight
My mind will find peace my heart shall rest

I really love this Alan. I can almost see the picture too. (I love electrical storms and the beach)

Dee


I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life.     a brand

[This message has been edited by Dee (edited 09-01-2001).]

Alan
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9 posted 2001-09-01 08:48 PM


Thank you Dee..i am glad you like this.
1slick_lady
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10 posted 2001-09-01 08:59 PM


"On the horizon I see storm clouds
I love the lightning if the thunder is not too loud
The rain helps hide the pain and tears"

and

"So as I once again turn and walk to the light
The darkness and fears take flight for at least one night
Though in the distance I can hear the familiar rumbles

Making me realize that as long as I live
I have to take what life chooses to give
Holding on to the hope that my life doesn’t crumble"

very powerful write here...helen


Alan
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11 posted 2001-09-01 09:08 PM


Thank you Helen, for taking the time to read and reply
alan

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12 posted 2001-09-01 09:22 PM


Alan~
Very vivid imagery~
What a lovely gift of inspire~
~*Marge*~

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13 posted 2001-09-01 10:12 PM


Very beautiful.
Sandra

Alan
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14 posted 2001-09-01 11:08 PM


thanks ladies...
Poet Unknown
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15 posted 2001-09-01 11:50 PM


Watching the storm roll in...wonderful
Alan
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16 posted 2001-09-01 11:58 PM


thanks poet
vandana
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17 posted 2001-09-02 11:05 AM


enjoy
Sunshine
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18 posted 2001-09-02 04:44 PM



One of your better poems, poet!  Well done!

Wes Utica
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19 posted 2001-09-02 06:00 PM


Alan, you've blended visual and verbal art so well allowing us to step into the frame of your picture.
ethome
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20 posted 2001-09-02 06:58 PM


Those pictures from a daughter or son are the ones that really capture the heart. You have expressed your loving feeling here very well...Well done!
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