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RSWells
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0 posted 2001-08-31 07:18 PM



Atlas-(ANAT.)- The first cervical vertebra, which supports the head.


He wearies in this hollow space
in the statue that he built,
while others see a Titan's face
not the dwarf up on stilts.

Just the echoes of a mortal
amplified to impress,
look behind the iron worked portal
there's a man who's depressed.

A Colossus in the harbor,
bronze Apollo at Rhodes,
whose wonder sinks in silted shore,
whose time won't bear the load.

An ediface in whose facade
some others took their strength,
not brave Prometheus nor god,
his chain is at its length.

But chained he is not free to roam
too weak to hold the sky,
yet strong enough to write poems
amd man enough to cry.

© Copyright 2001 Richard S. Wells jr. - All Rights Reserved
Tracey
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1 posted 2001-08-31 07:34 PM


This really touched me. Very moving. So poignant.

Tracey

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Janet Marie
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2 posted 2001-08-31 08:35 PM


whose wonder sinks in silted shore,
whose time won't bear the load.

An ediface in whose facade
some others took their strength,

not brave Prometheus nor god,
his chain is at its length.


But chained he is not free to roam
too weak to hold the sky,

yet strong enough to write poems
amd man enough to cry.

===================================

this touches me in many ways, for many reasons...
I relate so well to these feeling...
close friends always telling me.."you cant save the world" "you give too much of you away"
hell most days I cant save myself...but there is the need ...fill the holes.......

the last two lines of this heartfelt beauty touch me in places deep...
one day a time, its all we can do.
jm


"Failure is not in the falling down ...
it is in the not getting back up"


Denise
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3 posted 2001-08-31 10:37 PM


Excellent expression, RS. Very well done! Sometimes we think we have to carry the weight of the world on our shoulders, then one day we realize we are not strong enough and feel that we are close to becoming undone. Then one day we realize that we don't have to carry that load because nobody asked us to, it was something that we put upon ourselves.
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