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Wes Utica
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0 posted 2001-08-31 07:06 PM



DANCES WITH RAIN

The day you took your clothes off and danced in the rain
I wrote down a poem about how your crimson hair, metallic

with wet luster was plastered against your pale skin
and I thought of William Carlos Williams'

poem about how so much depends
on a red wheelbarrow glazed with rain

and the meaning became so clear
I stopped writing and began to dance

© Copyright 2001 Wes Utica - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2001-08-31 07:10 PM


Wes--

This has a great deal of impact.  I just want to nod my head and say, wow!

Paula Finn
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missouri
2 posted 2001-08-31 11:35 PM


I see your name and it just tears at my heart...but I am drawn in nonetheless...and entranced with the picture you paint...I too dance in the rain  
ethome
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3 posted 2001-09-01 04:23 AM


A precious moment well captured in your words here!  Wonderful literary example!      Enjoyable reading!
serenity blaze
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4 posted 2001-09-01 09:00 AM


This is a beauty. I adore it--terrific visuals and profound too. I enjoyed greatly.

Alan
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5 posted 2001-09-01 09:49 AM


Great read Wes..I really enjoyed it
Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
6 posted 2001-09-01 10:17 AM


Wes,
A Picaso of impact. Enjoyed

SmittenKitten
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7 posted 2001-09-01 11:50 AM



Mmm...nothing like a good dance in the rain!  Loved the imagery and impact of this Wes  

~Krista  

"Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you.
And all you can do is to go where they can find you."
~Winnie the Pooh

Tiersdin
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8 posted 2001-09-01 07:45 PM


awesome!


~Tier

Dee
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9 posted 2001-09-01 09:18 PM


Wes, what can I say but I loved this?   You created a scene I enjoyed watching.

Dee

I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life.     a brand

vandana
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10 posted 2001-09-02 11:09 AM


welcome to passions enjoy
Lady Ollyne
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11 posted 2001-09-02 12:22 PM


Your glazing, each a show of words
Reigns upon me, mysting such.
Tooth Fairy, mine or to whom belongs
I dry my tears, when eyes see touch...
Yes stringing words together, you
bending ideas, uniquely yours
stretched my mind, enhanced this ride  
enjoying always when yours, I tour.

smiling at remembrances

another time, another place
another name, once in this space...

Lady Ollyne



"O, learn to read what silent love hath writ:
To hear with eyes belongs to love's fine wit"...Shakespeare

[This message has been edited by Lady Ollyne (edited 09-02-2001).]

Wes Utica
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12 posted 2001-09-02 05:37 PM


Thank you all for your kind words. If you are not familiar with William Carlos Williams' poem - The Red Wheelbarrow - here it is:

so much depends
upon
a red wheel
barrow
glazed with rain
water
beside the white
chickens

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