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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2001-08-30 10:08 PM



    No Point Made

can you see
who I am inside
when things of me
I clearly hide
sometimes no tears
from eyes pour
for smiles can cover
a pains décor

no point is made
in pointlessness
and silence is
no word in express
at times there is
no trust for the giving
torn hearts don’t die
they keep on living




"...the rest is silence" (Hamlet)  Shakespeare

[This message has been edited by 1slick_lady (edited 08-30-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-08-30 10:25 PM


wow Helen, this is fantastic.  
jwesley
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2 posted 2001-08-30 10:39 PM


Helen,

Really like what this had to say, but two lines I stumbled over...from eyes in pour & no word in express... (the word "in" in particular in the usage).  Broke the flow...other than that...beautiful write.

jwesley


Professor Gloom
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3 posted 2001-08-31 08:48 AM


Very nice, enjoyed

Gloom

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4 posted 2001-08-31 08:49 AM


Very good job. I loved the way it flowed.

Jenn

"Baby I've been drifting away, dreaming all day, of holding you, touching you, the only thing that I wanna do is be with you..."Faith Hill

Zinsser
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5 posted 2001-08-31 09:32 AM


Beautiful!
Honeybee
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6 posted 2001-08-31 12:41 PM



Awesome Poem, Helen!

Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

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