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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2001-08-30 04:29 PM


Rumbling grumble
From the throats of clouds
Protesting the slashing cut
Of lightning hits my ears
Long before the rain falls
On fields bent in reverence
Of passing wind

Another storm to watch

I remember a storm of youth
When huddled beneath a bluff
We watched the fury
Felt the finality
When it passed

Soaked clothes shed
We hung them on limbs
Then played naked in water
Now muddied
Until holding you face to nose
We kissed
And eager fingers fumbled,
Stuttered, found pleasure
minds clutter freed
we fell into each other


Later dressing you turned modestly
Away from eyes that devoured you only hours ago
And your own windowed panes demurred
As if now ashamed

Things changed then
No longer free with me
You chose to avoid

But I still watch storms
And wonder if in the flash you see
When lightning strikes close
You know how close we came
To being struck

[This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (edited 08-30-2001).]

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Decaflame
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1 posted 2001-08-30 04:35 PM



Oh Bravo for the recall of stormier times...

well done!

Martie
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2 posted 2001-08-30 04:51 PM


Cpat--Interesting how abandon happens in a carefree minute.  I really enjoyed reading this..thank you.
JamesMichael
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3 posted 2001-08-30 04:54 PM


Very nice....James
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4 posted 2001-08-30 04:57 PM


bittersweet flash of stormier times.
Enjoyed the read very much!

Charisma

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5 posted 2001-08-30 05:01 PM


Mmmm, stormy weather....exciting, very nice thoughts expressed here. Enjoyed!

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

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6 posted 2001-08-30 05:37 PM


How innocently the storms of our youth lose their playfullness.  Great rendition here.
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7 posted 2001-08-30 05:45 PM


Stormy yet tender and playful skinny dipping is a lot of fun. I enjoyed this very much, Cpat

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.
ARAB PROVERB

MARK V SHELDON
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8 posted 2001-08-30 07:40 PM


I love the subtle depth to this piece, Ron...  it leaves a lasting impression, both with the senses and with the mind.  Your stuff just keeps getting better & better!

-MVS

"It's all in the details -- the Big Picture always takes care of itself."
-MVS


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9 posted 2001-08-30 07:47 PM


It's all in the timing, isn't it?.. Nice write, Capn..
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10 posted 2001-08-30 08:22 PM


Nice stormy scene, touched with love.
Sandra

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11 posted 2001-08-30 09:51 PM


I think that I could most echo Mark Sheldon and the one about bittersweet memories.
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12 posted 2001-08-31 05:09 AM


I LOVE storms...This is sexy, CH...
Marge Tindal
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13 posted 2001-09-01 08:11 AM


CPatHair~
I like what you've done with this soooooo much~
~*Marge*~

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SmittenKitten
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14 posted 2001-09-01 11:41 AM


Ooo...Ron, I love this!  Your stormy weather memory is certainly one worth looking back on!  

Very deep write...
~Krista  

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And all you can do is to go where they can find you."
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15 posted 2001-09-01 12:36 PM


"Things changed then
No longer free with me
You chose to avoid

But I still watch storms
And wonder if in the flash you see
When lightning strikes close
You know how close we came
To being struck"

very powerful write...helen

catalinamoon
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16 posted 2001-09-02 04:43 PM


Ok, I know I already said this, but I really like this, the ending strikes so strongly. You never forget such moments, or what might have been.
Sandra

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