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rascalx
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0 posted 2001-08-29 08:45 PM


All These Things


Looking in the mirror
My reflection is looking for you
Feeling your touch
in the curves of my skin
My hands still feel your softness
brings a blush to my grin

Missing you again
Your scent washes over me
as I touch your clothes
surrounded by reminders that
You're a part of my life now
I'm still scared
but I know that it will be
wonderful somehow

falling faster and faster
My heartbeat blurring with
the rush of hummingbird wings

All these things... I thought
I'd never say or do
are now all the things
I do for you
and with every "I love you"
that these things bring
Know that mind, body and soul
I love you too


© Copyright 2001 Jeff Osborne - All Rights Reserved
Sven
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1 posted 2001-08-29 08:48 PM


Jeff. . . it's always the scary part. . .  

great job my friend. . .

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Enchantress
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2 posted 2001-08-29 08:54 PM


Great work...sooo tender too!

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

Marge Tindal
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3 posted 2001-08-29 09:55 PM


RascalX~

'falling faster and faster
My heartbeat blurring with
the rush of hummingbird wings'


What a wonderful image pops to mind at this.

Very nicely said~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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rascalx
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4 posted 2001-08-30 12:20 PM


Sven,
     Yes, it is scary..but in a "WHEEEEEEE! roller-coaster" kind of way! lol

Enchantress,
     Thank you! (nice webpage by the way)

Marge,
     I'm glad you liked those lines. I was trying to figure out a way to capture that topsy-turvy butterflies-in-the-stomach feeling of falling in love with someone for the first time; I hope I succeeded.  
          
                         - Jeff

Temptress
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5 posted 2001-08-30 02:32 AM


This whispers loudly to me. I adore it!   You should write more so I can be in awe more.  
maeve
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6 posted 2001-08-30 02:58 AM


Isn't it amazing what love will do to us?   I enjoyed this, rascalx. Immensely.

Maeve

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to where my heart roams free.

rascalx
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7 posted 2001-08-30 06:05 AM


Jenn,
     Now if only it were true... *sigh* I long to feel this kind of love again... any volunteers? lol  

Dee
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8 posted 2001-08-30 08:18 AM


You show your heart so well, Jeff. Keep talking like that and you'll have plenty of volunteers.  

Dee

I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life.     a brand

ethome
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9 posted 2001-08-30 08:21 AM


Being scared is always a part of the intensity of love!  Great romantic style....good read!
dgvarner
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10 posted 2001-08-31 01:51 PM


Missing you again
Your scent washes over me
as I touch your clothes
surrounded by reminders that
You're a part of my life now
I'm still scared
but I know that it will be
wonderful somehow

falling faster and faster
My heartbeat blurring with
the rush of hummingbird wings
==========================================
volunteers you say?  ME ME!  pick me!  lol

very nice write jeff..much enjoyed..

"blurring with the rush of hummingbird wings"..thats an awesome discription..!

hugs, g

~dgvarner/fallen rain~

"i believe we are here for a reason.  
as each day unfolds,
we see less of the shadow
and more of the sun"  -unknown

Janette
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11 posted 2001-09-01 10:52 AM


Oh this is so lovingly romantic...sigh...it touched my heart.
Janette

Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 2001-09-01 11:32 AM


Rascalx,
Enjoyed the read.

vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...
13 posted 2001-09-03 12:56 PM



Jeff-
   This is awesome!
   I love the thoughts in this..  
   Especially...

       "My heartbeat blurring with
       the rush of hummingbird wings"


   That describes the feeling perfectly!
   I really enjoyed this.  

   Hugs,
   ~vicky



  


"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes

[This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 09-03-2001).]

passing shadows
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14 posted 2001-09-03 04:02 AM


nice feeling, ain't it? ahhh!
Tracey
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15 posted 2001-09-03 12:01 PM


How lovely, you've just captured the emotions in new love. What a wonderful feeling.

Tracey

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