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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2001-08-28 05:36 PM


I know the words
The ways
The times

Still they are hidden
Far from prying eyes
Distanced from
Searching minds

Sometimes they sing
Sirens song

Coaxing me closer
To shoals I do not
Navigate well in darkness

Sweet softness
In the melodies and tune
Belies the treacherous


Too many hulls breached
Too many days dry docked


I listen when they sing
But rarely sing
Along

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1 posted 2001-08-28 05:38 PM



I like the extra spacing between the stanzas...they make me feel as if each thought is not given up freely, but with reservation....

a true conversation of sorts, as if you were talking with someone...allowing space between comments....

and there is a mystical quality about this that pleases as well...

Enjoyed...

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2 posted 2001-08-28 07:24 PM


CPatHair~
Very nice, indeed !
A lovely flow of thought~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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rwood
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3 posted 2001-08-28 09:51 PM


Hmmmm...Perplexing and still very intelligible. Like today's music. I felt you were leading me in that direction. I hope I understood you.

Sincerely,
Regina

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