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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2001-08-28 04:25 PM


Sunrise this morning
painted azure with rose
to fill the eyes
in glaring soft
with portending change

I have watched the artist
in brush strokes on canvas
create such illusions
yet my own hands
seem meant for rougher work

Turned bolts or sawn boards
numbers lined in rows
mundane mechanicals
that do not show the beauty I see

Sunrise this morning
streaked the sky with hues
while I watched and felt
the shades of blue


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1 posted 2001-08-28 04:30 PM



So inspirational....

shadows hue his blue
still seeking silver and gold
panning his delight


thank you for this lovely imagery...

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2 posted 2001-08-28 04:32 PM


oh you do have such a way of taking the reader into your world.....nice work on this....
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3 posted 2001-08-28 04:42 PM


Cpat sometimes beauty can't be captured only watched an appreciated. That is what makes it so special no word or brush stroke can fully capture the feelings that beauty creates. BUt darn it you made a fine attempt. enjoyed this alot.

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the order of the soul" leonard cohen

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4 posted 2001-08-28 04:47 PM


Nothing wrong with feeling and watching shades of blue...because as John Lee Hooker sang...."The blues will heal ya!"
Very enjoyable write I enjoyed the reasoning within!

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5 posted 2001-08-28 04:55 PM


what a beautiful picture you paint with your words....beautiful!!

Charisma

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6 posted 2001-08-29 12:26 PM


CPatHair~

'Sunrise this morning
painted azure with rose
to fill the eyes
in glaring soft
with portending change'


Yes .... and your words paint it just as I see it~
Beautiful~
~*Marge*~

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7 posted 2001-08-29 12:36 PM


I loved this a lot, Cpat! But surely there is still beauty in what you can do/create with your hands, for hands that can not even move or feel would be so much a contrast.

Maybe I can liken it to the way the soil feels to my hands. I really have a hard time digging in the dirt with gloves on as I love to feel the soil, its coolness on a summer day down where the moisture lay, the texture as it sifts through my hands.  The way I can shape it and plant in it, encouraging things to grow, that is surely beauty in its doing. Things you make with your hands, though they may seem mundane because of a repetition are still beautiful in their having been crafted. Shake one hand with the other, feel the comeraderie, the union of purpose.

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8 posted 2001-08-29 01:27 AM


But of course the artist is not in the brush, but in the heart and from the soul.  
Truth in pigment or in words.
And here we have the words.
      

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9 posted 2001-08-29 07:52 PM


Lovely, lovely, lovely, just lovely!
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10 posted 2001-08-29 07:59 PM


'Turned bolts or sawn boards
numbers lined in rows
mundane mechanicals
that do not show the beauty I see

Sunrise this morning
streaked the sky with hues
while I watched and felt
the shades of blue'

Superb imagery, cpat hair...I especially relate to this, being I am trying to find just what it is in life I am supposed to do, and make it something semi-creative...I truly appreciate this...excellent write!

sp  


tried to write a letter
to tell you how I feel,
but all I kept on writing
was slipping on the tears from the day...

[This message has been edited by snowpants (edited 08-29-2001).]

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