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arthur
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since 2001-08-14
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england

0 posted 2001-08-28 02:24 PM


note:safeways is a large shop in Engalnd

The chance meeting by the fish stall

I met death in Safeways
She was by the fresh fish stall
She motioned me to come away
I didnt see him fall

I wanted to stay and see
The man laying on the floor
He looked a lot like me
But she pointed to the door

Her bus was waiting at its station
Death merrily rang the bell
I quitely asked my destination
She gleefully answered
Hell

arthur


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Cpat Hair
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1 posted 2001-08-28 02:47 PM


( smiling) I liked this... nicely told and rhymed... I especially liked the fact death was a she... not the usual he...

good stuff!!!

Carolina
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since 2001-08-17
Posts 224
Myrtle Beach, SC
2 posted 2001-08-28 03:04 PM


This was very good.  And to think I first thought the "she" was just a nice saleslady, pointing your way to the door.  

Live today as if it's your last.  Love today as if it's your first.   Lisa

shadow974
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since 2001-06-21
Posts 636
Michigan
3 posted 2001-08-28 03:12 PM


Well done it made me think, Enjoyed.

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.
ARAB PROVERB

Mother_Earth
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since 2000-11-20
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1/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan
4 posted 2001-08-28 03:43 PM


arthur, thank you for sharing and letting us see a different face on death.  ME
Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
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Canada eh.
5 posted 2001-08-28 10:47 PM


I love to be left pondering the different aspects of a poem, and this one did just that for me! Thank you.

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

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