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5 Sense Senryu
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5 Sense Senryu |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533
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Fan swings metronome as distant train rehearses tootle tinkle ting Youthful passions flushed hands smoothening moistened knead seduction's scherzo Warming wafted scent bunhaired aproned grandma's beam odor orders thanks Sorbet morsels melt tapestries whose savory jacquard juices flow Collage of photos mosaic of memories blur to aging eyes |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Youthful passions flushed hands smoothening moistened knead seduction's scherzo Warming wafted scent bunhaired aproned grandma's beam odor orders thanks Sorbet morsels melt tapestries whose savory jacquard juices flow Collage of photos mosaic of memories blur to aging eyes ========================== These are VERY COOL.... wonderful vocab choices... you created a lot of imagery and sensory with so few words...the art of senryu taken a step further.. very cool indeed good to read your words again.. (and to put a smiling face with the name)  Feels like Im dancin with truth and wisdom |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
these are WONDERFUL  and very handsome picture  |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
The senses are captured perfectly in this. I like the pic too.  |
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Siofra
since 2000-09-28
Posts 551State of Suspended Passion |
What wonderful work, Dear Sir! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
RSWells~ Very delightfully pleasing to read~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Delightful read throughout! |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Bravo! |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Very, very sensual...you've captured them all vividly!!! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
as usual... I look forward to seeing what gems you have hidden in here for us...these certainly are no dissapointment in that search.. I enjoyed a great deal..and find the vocabulary and the images quite refreshing. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow - very well done, I love the alliteration and your charismatic way with images and words~ Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
All senses are charmed and exhillerated, even the sixth one, as I somehow know you will do it again! Sincerely, Regina It's all in the mind |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
I very much enjoyed these. Look forward to more Senryu's from you. Well done. Deb |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
love it....love it.....love it!!! Great senryus Sir! Charisma |
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illusion Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 296 |
I especially like the last one - all are beautiful. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Well done in my favorite format it makes sense to me you do justice to this form congratulations Homepage : http://members.home.net/excalibur2501/interloper.htm |
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