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shadow974
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0 posted 2001-08-27 03:46 AM




Fantasies

Fantasy is the sand of a desert mirage
A gentle wind blows
The sand dances to my pleasure
Sand dancing on a high

Reality sets in
The sand stings the eye

If I could escape but no
My life is my own
So I’ll make it true

Fantasies come as a golden treasure
Teasing me with tantalizing pleasure

But when the day is done
I will be myself
I will realize that it was
Just a distraction

When I grow old
And look back at my life
I would like to do it
Without a serrated knife

To lie to yourself
Is to be a fool’s fool

I’d like to smile in the mirror
And see my heart smiling back

[This message has been edited by shadow974 (edited 08-27-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Daniel Owens - All Rights Reserved
Lost Dreamer
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1 posted 2001-08-27 06:28 PM


Interesting way of looking at the temptations that exist all around us. Yet you are right, at the end of the day or any period of time, the reflection looking back at us should be one, that we can love.
DawnG
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2 posted 2001-08-27 06:46 PM


This is a beautiful poem. Thank you for the read.

            Dawn

Trina
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3 posted 2001-08-27 08:18 PM


Very beautiful.
Suetang
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4 posted 2001-08-27 08:24 PM


Wonderfully written and so very much enjoyed.
Take care......Sue

Suetang

JamesMichael
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5 posted 2001-08-28 03:52 PM


I'm not sure if you are talking of fantasy or temptations...James
shadow974
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6 posted 2001-08-28 04:13 PM


I'm mainly talking about fantasies but they could someday become temptations that would then be very strong. Thanks for the comment James.

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.
ARAB PROVERB

Charisma
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7 posted 2001-08-29 09:23 AM


*wow* I like this one a lot.
well said!!

Charisma

Sven
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8 posted 2001-08-29 07:05 PM


I'm sure that it will. . .

I like this, I like the form that you've used here. . . gives it that "dreamy" quality that shows in the words that you've used. . .

great job. . .  

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Tracey
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9 posted 2001-08-29 07:22 PM


I especially love the part about not looking back with a serrated knife. Great poetry
Enotneicna
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10 posted 2001-08-29 07:23 PM


shadow......wonderful.....I enjoyed this much.


Scent of Calm

To breathe,
To find release from all things both good and bad.
Breathe deep the sweetness of clarity,
The aroma of what it means,
To truly know the person
Behind the face looking back
From your reflection.
The scent of blissful calm deep within those eyes.
The peace of spirit, mind and soul.
After which serenity of this outer shell comes,
Just comes.
Breathe deep.

Enotneicna
SLR
1999

Many blessings
Always
Eno


Words are my medicine.
Read and live and love and heal!


[This message has been edited by Enotneicna (edited 08-29-2001).]

shadow974
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11 posted 2001-08-29 08:49 PM


Thank you Lost Dreamer, It seems so easy to just fall over the edge, yet for me there is to high of a price to pay, inside.

Thank you Dawn, I'm glad you enjoyed.

Thank you Trina for the nice comment and the read.

Thanks Sue, for the nice comments. I'm glad you enjoyed.

Thank you Charisma.

Thank you Sven for the vote of confidence. I'm pleased that you enjoyed.

Thanks Tracey, I really want to keep the peace.

Eno, I love your poem, thank you.


Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.
ARAB PROVERB

[This message has been edited by shadow974 (edited 08-29-2001).]

rwood
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12 posted 2001-08-31 06:54 AM


I'm slow, but glad I didn't miss this one. The greatest thing IS to look in that mirror, and really like what you see. For everything you are. Sand and all! I loved this!

Sincerely,
Regina

catalinamoon
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13 posted 2001-08-31 08:30 AM


Says a lot, doesn't it?
The serrated knife was genius, I must say..
Sandra

Rick
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14 posted 2001-08-31 09:12 AM


Shadow974, our fantasies will always be there, they are our hopes and dreams which get us through this life we live. Our mirror reflect our image, one we must grow to like and accept. The mirrored image is not the true person, for we all come from within to greet the day and its people.
I enjoyed the read, thank you.

Rick

RSWells
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15 posted 2001-08-31 12:09 PM


We need our little escapes, our daydreams, our fantasies. The trick is not to stay there full time. As long as you can maintain the gaze of the man in the mirror you're alright. Great poem.
MARK V SHELDON
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16 posted 2001-08-31 12:19 PM


Some excellent realizations and descriptions, Dan:


Reality sets in
The sand stings the eye

When I grow old
And look back at my life
I would like to do it
Without a serrated knife

I’d like to smile in the mirror
And see my heart smiling back


Enjoyed this read -- thank you.

-MVS

"It's all in the details -- the Big Picture always takes care of itself."
-MVS


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