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Morning hush ....Tanka
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Morning hush ....Tanka |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages 
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 Morning hush Serene morning hush Present mysterious bliss gentle awaken while heavenly hands guides sun showing fragile rays of light Charisma ~*TMP*~ 24/08/01 |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Charisma~  always such beauty flows from your pen |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
So lovely Charisma! You were meant to pen tankas for sure!~Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Charisma, my friend~ You pen the gentlest of thoughts~ So lovely is this Tanka from you~ I've missed you, sweet poetess~ Now I smile~  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I can hear it now. . . lovely my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
so fragile they do appear yet so powerful is their wake the cool morning hush is a lovely time of day...you've captured it beautifully in word and on film |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Charisma, Well done, I enjoyed. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Sea: Thank you, I'm glad that you liked it. Melissa: thank you for the lovely and not sure if I meant to write....as I lost my muse somewhere. Marge: My beautiful friend, thank you for your always kind reply. Have missed ya and these blue pages too....and I'm so happy that you like my thoughts. Sven: dear friend....glad that you can hear it now. Vas: yes sunrise can start so fragile, morning hush a free gift from heaven that everyone can capture. Glad that you liked it. Seymour: thank you my friend |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
mysterious bliss is right..sometimes i wonder how fortunate undeserving mortals such as us to be able to enjoy such bliss... |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I like the style of this tanka very much... you didn't use any verbs in the first three lines, that was rather clever. It set the scene well. The last two lines I felt were somewhat separate, as is common with this format - they go into a description of event rather than setting. I love how you mapped the format and used it wisely to create a wonderful poem. As difficult as it is to fail at Tanka poetry, it is even more difficult to succeed. Kudos on a beautiful poem. ~Allan You eat the brains of an old, wise man. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
faterider: I too wonder what whe have done to deserve so much beautiful moments around us .....but even more that most of them are unnoticed. Allan: I am so glad that you like this tanka...all I do is to translate feelings that comes up when I inhale and observe the beauty within.....thank you for your reply that I highly apreciate |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
You always know how to bring a smile to a face and when I read one of your beautiful Tankas, I am always left with a feeling of being treated to the tranquility of a soul that knows and sees the beauty in life. Wonderful read and even more wonderful to find one of your works here. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Mark: Gald that I could bring up a smile on your face...it's alway great to see you around. |
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