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no dead fly |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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blue eye frost creased every line-- she dropped a menu in my face, tacky with the grease of time. and body of one dead green fly-- All of this beyond belief Still, I'm not the least surprised. But still, I'd like a pint of ale." From where I sat I smelled saloon. Somehow her pale skin paled. but I tell you whut... Behind that door? You'll find a floor that needs some sweepin' up." to a backstreet door. She smiled with eyes in wink of sly: "It's watchyer lookin' for." "Don't thank me. Just hand me five." I blinked and asked, "A five for tip?" She said, "Nope. It's five for sip." protesting, "I've not drank of ale." "It's for the water that you drank." I looked at glass and my heart sank... but for three cubes and no dead fly. |
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ramrog Member
since 2001-08-22
Posts 50 |
nice and humorous. I feel like i'm in that greasy spoon. |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Do you realize a "clean freek" just read your poem? I can't even imagine this? You are too funny. I even wipe off utensils in restaurants, and I bet I'd scream if I got a fly in my water or beer!  Very funny in a sick kinda way, lmao!  ~*If you can't say anything nice about someone, don't say anything at all*~ hmmm...they were smart whomever said that! [This message has been edited by Mysteria (edited 08-24-2001).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
another cute read..thanks Serenity ~Wynter |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
All my logic still prevailed, protesting, "I've not drank of ale." "It's for the water that you drank." I looked at glass and my heart sank... The glass was empty--almost dry-- but for three cubes and no dead fly. (chuckling) Isn't that the way it goes... we swallow the unacceptable a lot of times without knowing we did it..and when we realize we did...it makes us a bit queasy... I enjoyed!! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Wanted to thank those that read--I have only two words of explanation actually--BEER BUZZ.  |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
hehehe  oh Serenity...too funny!!! Cute cute cute... Hugs, ~Krista  "Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you. |
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illusion Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 296 |
This is great - I enjoyed it very much. In fact, I grimaced and grinned, then grabbed my pen:With such an appetizer, you probably skipped your meal Five dollars gone, no hunger left - really quite a deal! Of course, with such a repast, you needed lots of beer But examined every glass with care compelled by fear. Or just swig from the bottle on your way out the door? [This message has been edited by illusion (edited 08-24-2001).] |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
ew! |
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PoemCrazy Member
since 2000-11-30
Posts 159 |
hi! oh how tasty, a protein drink! he he!...tom |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Yuck girl...now you got me looking in my glass before I drink |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
LOL...this was very very cute, Serenity. I especially like the venacular and cultural wordings and phonetic spellings. That, I feel, added to the scene, and part of the absurdity. Also interesting was the total lack of understanding between the speaker and the waitress....they were talking two different languages and missing each other's points.  I enjoyed this one very very much. |
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