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Lady In White
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0 posted 2001-08-23 03:31 PM



Intriguing ideals
Come from lips that are sealed tight
Against all desire

[This message has been edited by Lady In White (edited 08-23-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-08-23 03:42 PM


Ooh, nice work.  I think this is a very unique senryu because of the subject matter... it's rare for that kind of thing to be put into this format.  More often I see this format being used for imagery, and not a statement like this one does...
Quite interesting, and a good write.     I'm impressed.
Oh and the ellipse in the title makes a nice effect.
~Allan

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2 posted 2001-08-23 03:44 PM



Thank you Allan...for a young man, you have an old, knowledgeable soul...

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3 posted 2001-08-23 03:57 PM


and this IS intriguing---hmmmm...I'd say more? but?   My lips are sealed too!  
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4 posted 2001-08-23 04:02 PM


mumble mumble mumble...( trying to talk through sealed lips)

(using sign language)

An intriguing write... and thoughts worth sharing indeed...


I enjoyed...

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5 posted 2001-08-23 05:53 PM


My lips are sealed too  
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6 posted 2001-08-23 06:54 PM


Against all desire...Amen.  Love this.
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