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Aftertaste ( Iambe Ramble)
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Aftertaste ( Iambe Ramble) |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Iambe has been gone for weeks And she still lingers in my mind Like the after taste of too much garlic, It makes you thirsty, and nothing seems to satisfy. I passed the Red day back And just inside New Mexico the old truck Decided it too was thirsty, so I pulled over In Las Madre to get her a drink. Not much in Las Madre, A station with two pumps A grocery with 4 aisles And a bar with 8 stools, 6 tables, and a bartender old enough to have known Sam Houston personally. Still the beer was cold and it helped Get the taste out of my mind for a while. I guess I wasn’t looking, because she walked in And I didn’t even notice her until she got to the bar And asked the ancient one for a cold Miller. Her eyes were black. Not the kind of black you think about usually But a grey speckled black that seemed to change When she turned her head. I saw her bosom swell under the faded blue shirt When she breathed, and I remembered I had been alone Now for what seemed like months. I started to talk to her, But thought of Iambe and decided that replacing The garlic memories and after taste with jalapenos Was probably not for the best. The old truck and me Pointed our noses north for a while |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Sometimes even Jalapenos won't dispel the taste of garlic - garlic permeates more... so good to see even thoughts of Iambe come back to the boards.... well done, Sir! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
oh man...what a very cool write... excellent employ of imagery to tell the story. You wrote it so we could taste, smell and hear it while we saw it... and then felt the lonely right along with you. well done poet sir very cool indeed Feels like Im dancin with truth and wisdom |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
speaking of replacing Iambe...I know you can't do that..BUT...I LOST THE POEMS YOU SENT AND WANT THEM BACK!!!! Would ya mind sending them again? Purty Please?  I have grown quite fond of her too. I think we shot pool together once in a roadhouse in Mississippi. She beat the tar out of me too! |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
you are wonderful  this is wonderful |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
This brought a big smile to my face. What a fabulous finale, Ron. BRAVO! Ya done good, rascal |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Okay, your poem was wonderful, Ron. But forgive me by being sidetracked by Sen. She needs to write that roadhouse pool poem! Anyway... Yes. I like the subtle mix of tastes and wastes. |
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