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Janet Marie
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0 posted 2001-08-23 11:41 AM



~In The Distance~


There is distance in the space between us ...
Now feeling chained by what used to set us free
Doubt and discontent only add to the misery
And I can't see you anymore ...
Love's light slowly fades ... into the distance

There are lies in the space between us
Trust and faith have passed us by ...
To the point we cant even look each other in the eye
I don't think I believe in love anymore ...
Could it be out there for me ... somewhere in the distance

There is anger in the space between us
Compromise has lost its grace
Resentment grows and takes its place
There is a rage burning deep inside of me ...
From its hold ... I need to find distance

There is pain in the space between us
Old wounds and old scars ... forever bleed
Did we mistake love for an aching need
I need release from this agony ...
Healing is somewhere ... in the distance

There is loss in the space between us
Patience and passion lost to living a lie
Hearts break ... dreams fade ... then die
There has already been so much taken ...
And still my past follows me ... into the distance

There is emptiness in the space between us
In my heart there's just vacancy
Loneliness keeps me constant company
With nothing left to hold us here ...
It's safe to say ... we wont go the distance

There is silence in the space between us
The words to save this ... just cant be found
Listen close ... as love leaves ... it makes no sound
And now I can hear someone else calling to me ...
Perhaps there is something more ... off in the distance


Janet Marie



*repost at the request of a friend ...
thank you for remembering this one.
May you find your dreams in the distance.
*with some changes/rewrites from original post in open 8





Feels like Im dancin with truth and wisdom
Precious rhythm you are my guide
These days are sacred, my heart is humble
Oh warrior show me thy light

[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 08-23-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Janet Marie - All Rights Reserved
Decaflame
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1 posted 2001-08-23 11:44 AM



And look how far you have come through the distance, to be able to repost, without the hurt...

well done, Moth-lady....

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2 posted 2001-08-23 11:46 AM


in the distance lies many things...

this poem is lovely...sad recognition of the distance time and lack of attention to a relationship can create...

very well done... very well done indeed.



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3 posted 2001-08-23 11:47 AM


Wow....I'm so glad you reposted this.  I needed to read it as well...beautiful, just beautiful...
Hugs,
~Krista

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4 posted 2001-08-23 02:14 PM


That road wouldn't be calling you to N.O.? WOULD IT???   I would just love to see what you come up with after drinking raspberry tea brewed with Mardi Gras water!!!
Hugs you..haven't forgotten ya..just waking up here...I slept forever yesterday and feel like Rip Van Winkle...sigh.

And this poem? Just a few of the words that I understood too well. As YOU KNOW...but? Methinks a vacation would help tremendously!!! Winkie wink!  

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5 posted 2001-08-23 02:43 PM


Sure glad you reposted this.  Thank you

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6 posted 2001-08-23 03:26 PM


Beautifully done....loved it!

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

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7 posted 2001-08-23 04:04 PM


JanetMarie~
I was immediately sent thumbing through Rod McKuen's 'Come To Me In Silence' ...

And under his 'A Fist Full Of Snow' was this thought -

Have we been apart so long
that there's no getting back ?
Was there a curve
we didn't go around together,
one embankment one of us
  did not foresee ?
Worse - has someone else
been hiking down your highway ?'


How poignant your write~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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8 posted 2001-08-23 04:46 PM


Sometimes space and distance helps us breathe and see our real need.
Other times it becomes a place of no return.
Good poem. I see meaning in seeking relief, yet needing truth.

Deb

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9 posted 2001-08-23 05:14 PM


enjoyed
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10 posted 2001-08-23 05:18 PM


JM this reminded me of a very painful divorce I had, and a friend bought the book Marge spoke of, Rod McKuen's 'Come To Me In Silence' so I would get to the place of anger then forgiveness, lady...you covered every single emotion going in that poem, and I commend you for a fantastic piece of poetry - never mind that it stuck a nerve with me - by the way, consider yourself hugged!  

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11 posted 2001-08-23 05:34 PM


There is distance in the space between us ...
Now feeling chained by what used to set us free
Doubt and discontent only add to the misery
And I can't see you anymore ...
Love's light slowly fades ... into the distance

I hope I never have to feel this way..you have covered all areas of emotions...
beautifully written, JanetMarie

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



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12 posted 2001-08-23 05:35 PM


Glad this is a repost and not a fresh wound. Geez I loath liars. Good heartfelt write.

"Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve"

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13 posted 2001-08-23 07:01 PM


In the distance....*sigh* what I wouldn't
give for a tank full of gas, a fresh MB20
cd, a stary night and an open road...yeppers
baby....in the distance.  Love the way you
weave baby!! No one does it like you!!!



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14 posted 2001-08-23 08:00 PM


Nope, J...no fave lines here...the entire poem is captivating in its very well-expressed emotion...but, I wouldn't expect anything less from a JM post, repost or not...great write, m'friend!  

k  

tried to write a letter
to tell you how I feel,
but all I kept on writing
was slipping on the tears from the day...

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15 posted 2001-08-23 10:48 PM


and butterflies fly free...very gentle smile
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16 posted 2001-08-23 10:59 PM


JM thanks for reposting, this is absolutely beautiful, sometimes distance is needed.
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17 posted 2001-08-24 12:32 PM


Janet Marie--Sometimes in the distance, is where we see most clear...and there is always love waiting, it is in you.
Nan
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18 posted 2001-08-24 08:39 AM


We can grow together... or we can grow apart... Either way, grow we must - and live life - You've captured it well, JM..
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19 posted 2001-08-24 11:03 AM


Listen close ... as love leaves ... it makes no sound

This poem is filled with beauty and sadness and very well written - this line is particularly wrenching in its truth.


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20 posted 2001-08-24 12:15 PM


This is absolutely breath taking....and sometimes closeness is found in distance.

Have missed your writing my friend  

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21 posted 2001-08-24 02:21 PM


JM,
I agree with Nan and would like to add, there is always something in the distance.
Like Winkiewinkie me.

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22 posted 2001-08-24 03:37 PM


I can feel the tumbleweeds rolling down the lonely highway of your poem, snagging sensitive pockets of emotion and vulnerabilities...  I find that distance tends to be a better thing when it is observed in the rear view mirror rather than the windshield...  most of the time...  A haunting write, JM.  Thanks for the re-post.

-MVS

"It's all in the details -- the Big Picture always takes care of itself."
-MVS


Janet Marie
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23 posted 2001-08-24 09:41 PM


Thank you ALL for your kind replies and for the advice and compassion.
Thank you to my fellow poet pal who asked for this one to be reposted, there is no greater compliment than to have someone say they have never forgotten the effect a poem had on them and that it stayed with them......
that is the power and gift of poetry.
thank you to Poetry Land.
my love to all
jm

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24 posted 2001-08-25 12:10 PM


There is loss in the space between us
Patience and passion lost to living a lie
Hearts break ... dreams fade ... then die
There has already been so much taken ...
And still my past follows me ... into the distance

When going back is impossible, staying put unrealistic, moving on...beyond comprehension.  You've written it all here.  Glad you reposted this.

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25 posted 2001-08-26 03:50 PM



What's this????????  I do believe that "In The Distance", I hear the thunder of a thousand kicking up the dust on the plains of yesterday.  Maybe if you LISTEN real intently you can make out the sound of just one hoof trodding the parched soil.  Yeppers...........I do believe that it is getting closer.   (ride the white buffalo)

You always did know how to pen the emotions and the thoughts in poetic grace and beauty didn't you?  I am glad you reposted and thank you to the one who asked for this to come about again.  

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26 posted 2001-08-26 04:00 PM


Oh my....what a beautiful write...I think many can relate at these or some of these feelings...thank you for the repost.

Charisma

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27 posted 2001-08-26 04:08 PM


"and now I can hear someone else calling to me."
Seems like when a relationship is going well we don't hear these other voices and when it starts to deteriorate we hope we will hear another voice...James

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28 posted 2001-08-26 05:50 PM


JanetMarie, this is such a great poem. I think we've all been there, somehow, someway

Thank you 'person' who asked for this repost and thank you JM for reposting it.

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29 posted 2001-08-26 05:59 PM


Wow! Wow! Wow!
This is a sad but beautiful write....
<<<<< Clapping>>>>>>

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30 posted 2001-08-26 07:34 PM


a wedge does so increase the distance, continually...a perfect rendition of what happens once it's begun


I love the hope that is also held in this poem that perhaps, somewhere in the distance, love will find a home


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31 posted 2001-08-26 07:39 PM


There is pain in the space between us
Old wounds and old scars ... forever bleed
Did we mistake love for an aching need
I need release from this agony ...
Healing is somewhere ... in the distance

Hi Janet Marie

This is poetry that touches reality as well
as the reader's heart and spirit with powerful clarity and feeling. You have captured the essence of two estranged beings with expertise and artistic sensitivity. I can only marvel at your perception. It's a topic I think so many of us can relate to.

thank you
Wendy

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32 posted 2001-08-26 07:56 PM


Oh Janet! How you have captured those feelings. It seems that when everything is going well love gets taken for granted....but...when that distance comes along, wow! it just seems to kill everything that's alive.
I'm sure I remember this from before.....However, I'm so glad you reposted it is a work of art when it comes to expressing those empty feelings......
excellent!!  My dear poet pet!  Reminds me of this one I wrote that describes the reasons why these things can happen'''

                                   Miss the times when we were younger
                                   and the love we did invest
                                   and of all the love I kicked around
                                   I thought ours was the best.
                                   But I was never there for you
                                   and it drew us far from close.
                                   I was in sales and tellin tales
                                   and drinkin patron's toasts.
                                   I showed no favor for your choice
                                   and you spent your time alone,
                                   now you're gone and time moves on
                                   I know I did you wrong.

                                   Chorus:
                                   All the good times I could find
                                   took me far away from you
                                   and left you trapped inside
                                   while I was seeking dues.
                                   Now my lonely heart and mind
                                   roam round this empty soul
                                   and the lesson lingers overtime
                                   and I'm wishin you were home.

                                   I call you in the early morning
                                   to draw the past to mind.
                                   A brave new me, a change complete,
                                   I offer to your mind.
                                   You talk to me and my heart flips,
                                   I beg you back again.
                                   A concerned woman you see me
                                   and I can't seem to win.
                                   It's plain and simple who's to fault
                                   and your worries shake me off
                                   but you turn heartache into hoping
                                   and I'm glad to hear you talk.

                                   Chorus rep:

                                   Through all the years you held my name
                                   and stated your place with style
                                   and in the stress you'd address
                                   the absence of my smile.
                                   But your hopes went sadly thin
                                   I destroyed your cause.
                                   I didn't see your needs then
                                   I sought my own applause.
                                   Your love finally turned to ice
                                   it took a long long time.
                                   Now I live with the sacrifice
                                   of pushing you from my mind.

                                   Bridge:
                                   I remember our first home
                                   a simple captured thrill.
                                   and our driven dreams where the future gleams
                                   with the needs that all must fill
                                   and the late nights laying back
                                   talking after love
                                   and the fire there that burnt the air
                                   was the flame of all first loves.

                                   Now I've turned to other means
                                   you say your heart wont mend.
                                   So I push on into somewhere
                                   and I call you now and then.
                                   But when it's very late at night
                                   and I turn to share your soul.
                                   I cry softly to myself
                                   while another plays your role.
                                   So the good times ruined my time
                                   and I know I'm still alone
                                   beneath the scars I need your heart
                                   and I'm wishin you were home.

Have a nice day and write on my dear poet lady!!

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33 posted 2001-08-26 10:59 PM


You know, I remember the first time you posted this. It is so strong, and emotional, and just so you,  I love it. You have so many amazing poems, they all need another go round every once in a while. Glad you reposted this one.  
Janet Marie
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34 posted 2001-08-27 12:56 PM


Thank you all for so many wonderful replies
to this oldie....Im overwhelmed by these responses.
Ethome thank you sharing that beautiful song of yours.
Love and respect to poetry land.
THANK YOU
jm

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35 posted 2001-08-27 06:14 AM


I forgot to save this jewell from the heart of poetry!
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