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Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

0 posted 2001-08-23 08:19 AM

The Sharpened Sword

The blade’s been ground to bite like razor’s sting
This stropped and whetted sabre in your hand
It’s slice will make the still of breezes sing
And whip through air in whistling command

The sharpened sword has flushed your pulsing vein
You ready with a balestra to free
The fine honed words your hand can but contain
And lunge into the heart of poetry

The sword pricks velvet ribbon in her hair
With just a touch of sweetness to undo
The scarlet bow that bound her curls so fair
A slice as smooth as lily blades in dew

Etching with finesse of butterfly
Whose mystery between the phrases lie
With rapiers to slice a hemlock hedge
These poets who write verse with double edge

Elizabeth Santos

(Sorry if this is a repeat. It is a recent poem, but I can't remember if it was posted)

Lady In White

Member Elite

since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

1 posted 2001-08-23 09:52 AM

I don't recall seeing this before, and with words etched in blue as these are, I would have remembered it...

'tis beautiful, Lady....

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

2 posted 2001-08-23 11:34 AM

indeed, I too would have remembered such a fine poem my friend. . .

wonderfully done. . .

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Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

3 posted 2001-08-23 08:20 PM

I don't recall it either, Elizabeth! Another excellent expression!

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

4 posted 2001-08-24 02:48 AM

Nope, I remember them all! This was fantastic and I loved these lines:
"Etching with finesse of butterfly
Whose mystery between the phrases lie
With rapiers to slice a hemlock hedge
These poets who write verse with double edge"

~*If you can't say anything nice about someone, don't say anything at all*~ hmmm...they were smart whomever said that!

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

5 posted 2001-08-24 09:12 AM

Words can certainly be as sharp as any sabre... and can probably wound even deeper - a job well done, m'friend..

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

6 posted 2001-08-24 12:25 PM

WOW!! And your words slice this dim day like a sword

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

7 posted 2001-08-24 05:45 PM

Elizabeth~
Very nicely done~
Touché

*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Trillium

Member Patricius

since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

8 posted 2001-08-24 11:42 PM

Liz: I'm glad you decided to post this. It's wonderful!

Betty Lou Hebert

Martie

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

9 posted 2001-08-25 01:14 AM

Liz--Love the contrasting images in this, oh so well done, poem!

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