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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2001-08-22 03:14 PM


Trembling
quavered touch
of this softness
you so shyly
have offered

phrased
with simple punctuations
it flows from heart
to pen to paper
and lies there
delicately
hoping no gust
of wind will blow

eye stroked
the words shimmer
as tear dropped
the pains come alive
the heat begins to dry
the questions ask us why

Trembling
quavered touch
of this softness
you so shyly offer

I read again
the things inside


© Copyright 2001 Cpat Hair - All Rights Reserved
Decaflame
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1 posted 2001-08-22 03:19 PM



That one has offered such delicacies as you would cherish them so much as to pen this is a delightful thought...

well done Sir!

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Deep in the heart
2 posted 2001-08-22 03:22 PM


You DO hae a way with words my friend.  Wonderfully woven and laid out
cpalmer
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3 posted 2001-08-22 03:52 PM


Beautifully done! Bravo!
Cindi

rwood
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4 posted 2001-08-22 08:27 PM


There was much between these lines. You speak of writing in such versatile terms. This one is so very lovely.

Sincerely,
Regina

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Canada eh.
5 posted 2001-08-22 08:36 PM


Oh my...Oh my, so very good!! Enjoyed! Just let me catch my breath again.  

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

VAS
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6 posted 2001-08-22 11:43 PM


wonderful, wonderful, especially this section:

phrased
with simple punctuations
it flows from heart
to pen to paper
and lies there
delicately
hoping no gust
of wind will blow

Nan
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7 posted 2001-08-23 09:31 AM


Very lovely, Cap'n... I'm enjoying your words - They do somehow paint a completely new and unique portrait with each of your works... Nice write..
RSWells
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8 posted 2001-08-23 09:44 AM


Light and lithe lament to a literate Love (I take it) Enjoyed.
SEA
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with you
9 posted 2001-08-23 10:28 AM


Ron,
I love this.
touching deep.  
keeping this.  

vandana
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10 posted 2001-08-23 11:33 AM


enjoyed this
1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace
11 posted 2001-08-23 03:35 PM


"I read again
the things inside"
to be truly understood by another is one of the greatest gifts you can give them...helen

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