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AJ Keating
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since 2001-05-10
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0 posted 2001-08-22 11:58 AM



A willows cry is all we'll hear
As we walk this road of fear
And as we near the end of this road of fear
Who will be there?

As I look out my window at night
The faces of the damned stare back at me
And the light of the sacrificial rite
Is all that allows my eyes to see

I see troubadours and bridands
Marching through the streets
And the blood on their hands
Is flooding past their feet

Your gonna have to answer to your sisters
Have to answer to your brothers
Have to answer to your father,
so listen to your mother.

What once were green and lively
Have now turned into grain
what once was ecstasy
Has now turned into pain

Our youthful parents had started
The revolution in motion
But now they have parted
The sickly hazel ocean.

Your gonna have to answer to your sisters
Have to answer to your brothers
Have to answer to your father,
so listen to your mother.

"...apathy isn't it...we can do something. Ok, so flower power didn't work, so what?  We start again." John Lennon
      

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1 posted 2001-08-25 12:03 PM


exactly. . .

you've said it well here. . .

one thing. . . look at the first stanza and see if you can get away with not repeating "road of fear" in the third line. . .  

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AJ Keating
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New Hampshire
2 posted 2001-08-25 12:14 PM


The repetition was kind of purposeful.  It's a song much in the style of jim morrison :-)
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