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Honeybee
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0 posted 2001-08-21 08:22 PM



Twilight

Twilight haze ascends
caressing creamsicle moon
sapphire sky sambas
stars burn with intensity
bathing earth in amethyst

By Melissa P. Monette


"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

© Copyright 2001 Melissa P. Long-Monette - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-08-21 08:24 PM


deliciously gorgeous...even the words could stand alone and say as much, lovely!
shadow974
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2 posted 2001-08-21 08:28 PM


Wow, I really love this one Melissa. The picture the words just wonderful.

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.
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3 posted 2001-08-21 10:49 PM


twilight creamsicles????  what flavor is that??  

wonderful Melissa. . . just wonderful. . .

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4 posted 2001-08-21 10:52 PM


so beautiful!! I love this  
Alan
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5 posted 2001-08-21 10:58 PM


Beautiful words for a beautiful picture..great job
Flutterwings
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6 posted 2001-08-21 11:30 PM


I much enjoyed the colorful Tanka... A fantabulous piece.

A work of art.... Love and peace ~ Maggie


Janet Marie
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7 posted 2001-08-21 11:46 PM


sapphire sky sambas
stars burn with intensity
bathing earth in amethyst
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you just do these so very well...
you paint so many images with so few words...
and you find new unique visions in which to do it.
beautiful Melis...didnt need the pic  

cpalmer
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8 posted 2001-08-21 11:49 PM


Melissa, you are awesome! good work!
Cindi

Eloise
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9 posted 2001-08-22 12:10 PM


Wow, the picture says it all!  The descriptions were fantastic!
Chelsea~
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10 posted 2001-08-22 06:20 PM


missy,
you paint the night
so well!
yummy - a creamsicle
moon  


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11 posted 2001-08-22 07:30 PM


You have certainly done it this time!  A superb Tanka!  GR8  

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BloomingRose
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12 posted 2001-08-22 08:07 PM


Girl... you did good!
Love your style of writing.

Deb  

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13 posted 2001-08-22 10:08 PM


I must tell you this is certainly oen of the nicest duets I have seen, lovely.

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Parker
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14 posted 2001-08-23 07:59 PM


Melissa, you paint such a beautiful tanka.  

I must try one of these, one day.  

Parker

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15 posted 2001-08-23 08:09 PM


Love the vision you paint in your tanka,  nicely done.
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16 posted 2001-08-24 07:12 PM


WoW.....Melissa this one is utterly....beautiful tanka!

Charisma

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