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shadow974
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since 2001-06-21
Posts 636
Michigan

0 posted 2001-08-21 07:41 PM




Two Loves

If I could
I’d give you the world
But that would be my world

I would enfold you in developing wings
And protect you from all ominous things

I would embrace you in a love so strong
It would last till all the stars
Come tumbling down

I would buy you many precious gifts
Enough to take away all strain

I would protect you from the coldest rain

I would grant you your every desire
I’d be the only one you’d hire

I would build bold mansions
So you could fill them with you expansions

But I wonder
Is this love
Or is this the smothering of the dove that dwells within you

Love to me is a symphony of small treasures
Lasting pleasures and memories combined

If I meet your every need
Will there be room in your heart for me

Can it be that love is free
Needing no prodding to be seen

I will give you some and love you much
Because we both need room to grow

A smothering and overwhelming love
Last but a short time
One day you will look back and agree

Take in what you can and save it in your heart
Love long love strong because now you are free

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.
ARAB PROVERB

© Copyright 2001 Daniel Owens - All Rights Reserved
Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
1 posted 2001-08-21 07:45 PM


Very much wisdom filled and unconditional is a love that truely sees.  Wonderful write and I really enjoyed the format and flow of this piece.  Great write.
Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2001-08-21 08:30 PM


This was a pleasure to read aloud...
your rhyme flow and lines of inner rhyme are well done...and I like the way you break from the more traditional verse structure..
Ive noticed that pattern on several of your poems...your own style,
the imagery in this is well done also.
a lovely poetic declaration
great writing poet sir  
jm

Feels like Im dancin with truth and wisdom
Precious rhythm you are my guide
These days are sacred, my heart is humble
Oh warrior show me thy light

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