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Marge Tindal
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0 posted 2001-08-20 12:38 PM



After The Edit ...

~*Marge Tindal*~

Softly scrolled on pages blue
divine of verse from pen of you
Sighs from heart deep in me
for the visions that came to be

Melody of love, played in nightly song
Gilded serenade, holds my heart in your belong
The lilt of your rhapsodic rhyme
holds me gently for all of time

Through pages of this screen you came
etched in verse of your sweet name
Not caring what another might think
I have surrendered to your ink

I've come to know this much is true
After the edit ...
I'm still in love with you ...


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
                                   noles1@totcon.com            

© Copyright 2001 Marge Tindal - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-08-20 12:44 PM


Oh Marge...after the edit? Who would dare edit you? Soft and lilting and true to heart.
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2 posted 2001-08-20 12:51 PM


Awe for one who needs no editing...this is beautifully done...I love your work!
Big Hugs
Cindi

God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears
Cpalmer

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3 posted 2001-08-20 08:33 AM



You've surrendered to someone's ink?  Marge, who stands alone?  Someone's captured your heart?

Oh Bravo!

ethome
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4 posted 2001-08-20 08:40 AM


After the edit or before the edit the inspiration for this piece must have come from deep within. That's how it speaks to me anyway!
Good verse Marge, very enjoyable!

Nan
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5 posted 2001-08-20 08:44 AM


Love that can withstand the delete key - I love it... ... KEWL
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6 posted 2001-08-20 09:12 AM


very nice..and to sucumb to the words of another penned... can be a beautiful thing...


I enjoyed!!!

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7 posted 2001-08-20 10:10 AM


Through pages of this screen you came
etched in verse of your sweet name
Not caring what another might think
I have surrendered to your ink

I've come to know this much is true
After the edit ...
I'm still in love with you ...
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oh I love this premise..."after the edit"
how very cool ....
and ya just KNEW mothy me would love this one  
ahhhh yes....surrender to the pretty blue flame *L*
a lovely romantic penning Margie-girl
sigh for us some more  
me

Feels like Im dancin with truth and wisdom
Precious rhythm you are my guide
These days are sacred, my heart is humble
Oh warrior show me thy light

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8 posted 2001-08-20 08:55 PM


This is soooooooo romantic! I love it!
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9 posted 2001-08-20 09:29 PM


It is truly hard to love the 'editor'...you wrote this with such love....
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10 posted 2001-08-20 09:33 PM


Marge--You know you had me smiling with this one.  It is a beautiful poem with a feeling uniquely you...which makes it special.  Hugs!
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11 posted 2001-08-20 09:39 PM


Very tender.  Love this one Marge.  
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12 posted 2001-08-20 10:13 PM


Fantastic write!  How well you weave your words ... a tapestry of majesty!

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Marge Tindal
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13 posted 2001-08-21 04:12 AM


Serenity~
Ahhhhhhh ... but sometimes it's necessary, no ?

Cindi~
We all can do with a little changing and rearranging~

Karilea~
LOL !  Jeez, ya' make me sound like an ole lonesome pine~
Got us laughing for sure !

ETHome~
Thank you, sweetie~

Nan~
LOL ... 'delete' is a little permanent !

CPatHair~
'Succumb' is a nice way of saying it~
Thank you.

JanetMarie~
Oh, I just love you to pieces !

Denise~
Thank you ... romance of the quill~
Ahhhhhhhhhhhhh !

PoetdeVine~
Yes, thank you.
And it's really quite easy - and certainly fun !

Martie~
Thank you, love.
Sister of my heart, I so appreciate you.

Eloise~
*Hugs* to you, sweet lady.

InterLoper~
Thanks, sweetheart~
*Hugs* to all~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
                                   noles1@totcon.com            

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14 posted 2001-08-24 02:28 AM



Marge-
   This one brought a smile to my face.
  
          "After the edit ...
     I'm still in love with you ..."


   I just love that!
  
   Hugs,
   ~vicky


"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



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15 posted 2001-08-24 02:33 AM


I like this very much.

Marge Tindal
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16 posted 2001-08-24 02:52 AM


Vicky~
Thank you for everything, my friend~
Thank you mostly just for being here and being you~
*Hugs* ... *Hugs* ... n' all that jazz~

RamRog~
Thanks for the read and reply~
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
                                   noles1@totcon.com            

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