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kaile
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0 posted 2001-08-19 10:04 AM


filth-stained personnel
intense scrubbing gone to waste
filth accumulates

© Copyright 2001 heng kaile - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2001-08-19 10:33 AM


Faterider,
Good morning sunshine. Or perhaps not? Enjoyed

catalinamoon
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2 posted 2001-08-19 10:57 AM


Nicely done, but hey CHEER UP  
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3 posted 2001-08-19 11:00 AM



Where's the hose? I've got the soap! Well done faterider!

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4 posted 2001-08-19 11:39 AM


some things need more than a great washing to be clean

I just learned of a new product, "Smells Begone"  wow, does it work well, but even so, when it comes to people, water is not the universal solvent, living water is needed

what a thought provoking senryu, sir

Titia Geertman
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5 posted 2001-08-19 11:54 AM


Nice senryu, like it very much.

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dgvarner
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6 posted 2001-08-19 11:21 PM


..whats up FATERIDER...??  

great senryu...but i hope its not a reflecions of kaile...

hope to see the happy write at the end of blue...  

hugs, g

~dgvarner/fallen rain~

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as each day unfolds,
we see less of the shadow
and more of the sun"  -unknown

cpalmer
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7 posted 2001-08-20 12:14 PM


So how are we going to clean up the filth faterider?  I have a little hope, faith and Joy to give will that help? Very nice senryu   Enjoyed
Hugs
Cindi

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8 posted 2001-08-20 01:49 AM


It sounds less like low self-esteem, and more like Obsessive Compulsive Disorder. Beautiful though.

"We also know how cruel the truth often is, and we wonder whether delusion is not more consoling."- Henri Poincare (1854-1912)

kaile
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9 posted 2001-08-20 06:50 AM


thanking for reading this...am feeling pretty lousy these few days but hey, i got a senryu written...which isn't too bad, i suppose  

i'll cheer up and write something funky...  

i very much liked your comment, secret whisper..feeling compelled to write one about OCD now

[This message has been edited by faterider (edited 08-20-2001).]

ethome
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10 posted 2001-08-20 08:28 AM


dark but very effective!
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11 posted 2001-08-21 09:05 AM


first start with the mind
cleansing there purifies all
then dirt rinses off

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