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Eloise
Senior Member

since 1999-11-27

Posts 1096
Wyoming

0 posted 2001-08-20 10:01 PM

The treasured things we've seen and done,
Our time together had just begun.
But it was just another story in a dream.
Lost from your heart to mine, or somewhere in between.

We had a special song, that no one else could hear.
But now it plays inside my head, and brings with it a tear.
Left sitting outside in the cold,
With whispered promises left untold.

Once again I'm all alone.
No one left to call my own.
Time stands still as I struggle along,
Just me, my heart, and a lonely song.

Daniel J D
Senior Member

since 2000-10-01

Posts 1471
Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia

1 posted 2001-08-21 12:15 PM

Eloise,
This is very sad. I do hope that your call for happiness comes good very soon.
Cheers

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

snowpants
Member Elite

since 2000-09-16

Posts 2061
KS

2 posted 2001-08-21 12:16 PM

Sad poem, Eloise, but definitely well written...great rhyme and flow...

sp

can I see my world without you in it?
baby, not for a single minute...

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

3 posted 2001-08-21 12:17 PM

this is a song that I know far too well. . .

well written. . . but sad. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

MyEnchanted_Melody
Senior Member

since 2001-05-30

Posts 1106
across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.

4 posted 2001-08-21 04:17 PM

Such a lonely song.......

Well done......

I'm sure many can relate to this......

Thank you....
******************************

"Oh...me!Oh Life!
Of the questions of these recurring..........
Of myself forever reproaching myself,
for who more foolish than I......"
~Whitman~

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

5 posted 2001-08-21 07:58 PM

Soooooo sad. So very well expressed, Eloise.

shadow974
Senior Member

since 2001-06-21

Posts 636
Michigan

6 posted 2001-08-21 08:09 PM

Beautifully written and full of sorrow.
Best wishes

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.
ARAB PROVERB

BloomingRose
Member Elite

since 2000-08-09

Posts 3092
Florida

7 posted 2001-08-21 08:33 PM

This is a bit sad, but sure would make a great song!

Deb

Eloise
Senior Member

since 1999-11-27

Posts 1096
Wyoming

8 posted 2001-08-21 11:24 PM

Thank you all so much for reading and commenting. I appreciate each and every one of them.

At one time or another we probably have all been there.

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

9 posted 2001-08-22 05:15 PM

enjoy

Blaec
Member

since 2001-04-23

Posts 130
The Sunshine State

10 posted 2001-08-22 06:21 PM

This is very sad, I relate to it all to well. I tell you what I tell myself, 'there are better days ahead'!
Great write!

Kris

Eloise
Senior Member

since 1999-11-27

Posts 1096
Wyoming

11 posted 2001-08-22 08:48 PM

Thank you vandana. Glad you enjoyed it.

Blaec, thank you and you're right there are always better days ahead. We just need to look and find them!

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