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MoonShadow
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Dark side of the Moon.

0 posted 2001-08-18 06:27 PM




    "MoonShadow's Sonnet"

I pray the moon will greet me in the night,
and pass its lovely shadow down below,
to cloak me with a mantle of star light
and warm me with its pale and waning glow.

I seek the soothing shadow of the moon,
so drawn to awesome beauty in a trance.
I hear a haunting melody and tune.
My soul weaves to a fro, like in a dance.

We blend togehter well, the Moon and I,
till we are almost one in love's embrace.
A mutual attraction, Earth and Sky,
together, arm in arm and face to face.

My soul will be content like nights before,
enfolded by MoonShadow ever more.


© Copyright 2001 Kenneth W. Myers - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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1 posted 2001-08-18 08:09 PM


I pray the moon will greet me in the night,
and pass its lovely shadow down below,
to cloak me with a mantle of star light
and warm me with its pale and waning glow.
===========================

We blend togehter well, the Moon and I,
till we are almost one in love's embrace.
A mutual attraction, Earth and Sky,
together, arm in arm and face to face.
================================

this is stunning ...
the imagery in this is enchanting...
your poetic phrasing and use of ethereal comparisons to define the emotions creates a lovely romantic intend...
the cadence made this a delight to read aloud.
very well done poet sir
jm

Feels like Im dancin with truth and wisdom
Precious rhythm you are my guide
These days are sacred, my heart is humble
Oh warrior show me thy light

mirror man
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2 posted 2001-08-18 09:00 PM


Sonnets are so difficult to write.  And writing them well twice so.  Very good.
shadow of the fall
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3 posted 2001-08-18 10:45 PM


it's VERY enchanting!!!!

Karen

jwesley
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4 posted 2001-08-18 11:10 PM


Much applause, MoonShadow...

jwesley

Sweeetsuz
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5 posted 2001-08-18 11:54 PM


Ahhh and and a love sonnet too.... well done and not at all easy to do.

Blessed be and merrily met with good thoughts and feelings to all


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6 posted 2001-08-19 12:35 PM


This is beautiful and you obviously have a flair for sonnets!

Betty Lou Hebert

paladin
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7 posted 2001-08-26 08:23 AM


Classic.It is refreshing to read poetry in a formal style.

paladin

Victoria
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8 posted 2001-08-26 10:35 AM


Beautifully done..enjoyed....

              ~Victoria~


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9 posted 2001-08-27 01:01 AM


MoonShadow~

'We blend togehter well, the Moon and I,
till we are almost one in love's embrace.
A mutual attraction, Earth and Sky,
together, arm in arm and face to face.'


Very nicely done.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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catalinamoon
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10 posted 2001-08-27 08:02 AM


Lovely, I think you should change the title and print this out, as Sonnet for the Moon..
I feel just this way about the moon, you have captured it perfectly, and with great style.
Sandra

BloomingRose
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11 posted 2001-08-27 08:11 AM


Beautiful sonnet.
Great job!

Deb

Decaflame
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12 posted 2001-08-27 12:03 PM



Very nice!

Enchantress
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13 posted 2001-08-28 11:00 PM


Absolutely beautiful!

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

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