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rascalx
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0 posted 2001-08-17 12:56 PM


Shade Street


Take a walk with me down Shade Street
where our features blend into nothingness
and all that can be seen is our silhouettes
where the reality of who we are is hidden
and we can act out our fantasies in the dark
no commitments to be had
what you ask for is what you get
We can even hold hands like lovers
and touch each others bodies
as long as we're naked
clothes give away too much but we can touch souls
and if by chance we lose touch then don't worry
there are other silhouettes in the dark
and my shape will always be there to fill in the holes

somebody out there is shining a spotlight
trying to expose us as we're caught in the glare
eyes in the headlights
pinned to the pavement
waiting for the killing shot and we don't even care
Let's flee to the darkness
Let's escape to Shade Street

We're moths drawn to the flame
not knowing that fire burns us
even as it closes the wound
while others race for the light
believing that it may show colors
we run away for fear of being blinded
but maybe one day we'll be afraid of the dark
and I'll light a candle and show you my face

Take a walk with me down Shade Street
you can see all of the people that live there
in dark houses that have no colors
and everything is plain
we're scared of each other and don't know
where to begin
but if we can walk together long enough
then let's not live on Shade Street
maybe we can walk into the light again



© Copyright 2001 Jeff Osborne - All Rights Reserved
Duncan
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1 posted 2001-08-17 01:31 AM


I got alot of different thoughts from this and I love the title.
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2 posted 2001-08-17 08:37 AM


We're moths drawn to the flame
not knowing that fire burns us
even as it closes the wound
while others race for the light
believing that it may show colors
we run away for fear of being blinded
but maybe one day we'll be afraid of the dark
and I'll light a candle and show you my face
really liked these lines...

enjoyed the poem

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3 posted 2001-08-17 01:11 PM


I would say that it's time to move away from here. . .

great job. . . I got a lot from this. . . a lot of lost feelings and things that you've been holding on to. . . .well done. . .

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snowpants
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4 posted 2001-08-17 03:58 PM


'We're moths drawn to the flame
not knowing that fire burns us
even as it closes the wound
while others race for the light
believing that it may show colors
we run away for fear of being blinded
but maybe one day we'll be afraid of the dark
and I'll light a candle and show you my face'

This is an excellent piece, rascalx...the images are brilliant...great write...

sp  

can I see my world without you in it?
baby, not for a single minute...

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5 posted 2001-08-17 07:28 PM


Oh, Jeff! I love this! I've spent my time on that street it seems.   Veryp well done, sir poet!  

dgvarner
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6 posted 2001-08-17 10:52 PM


*shivers*  ....WOW!  deep..i'm really liking this!

i want to sit in a corner of your mind and see the pictures YOU see in this one..

much enjoyed..

hugs, g

~dgvarner/fallen rain~

in front of total strangers will ya kiss me..
flowers for no reason but you miss me..
oh..i wanna be in love.. -etheridge

Tara Simms
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7 posted 2001-08-21 12:06 PM


Jeff, this is a new, improved version of what you had before.  The changes give this poem more of an 'edge'. I like it!
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8 posted 2001-08-21 11:49 PM


This was an excellent poem but you know what I think, take your flashlight and go find her again, too many coincidences my young friend.  

If you have but one true friend when you die you were truly blessed.
   ~* Mysteria *~

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9 posted 2001-08-21 11:54 PM


~"but maybe one day we'll be afraid of the dark
and I'll light a candle and show you my face",...I love this especially. How that touches. Enjoyed this. *Peace.


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10 posted 2005-08-18 02:04 AM


Came back for seconds I loved this part the most, as it is so full of hope.

We're moths drawn to the flame
not knowing that fire burns us
even as it closes the wound
while others race for the light
believing that it may show colors
we run away for fear of being blinded
but maybe one day we'll be afraid of the dark
and I'll light a candle and show you my face

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