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ShadowRider
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0 posted 2001-08-16 08:12 PM


"Cracks"

at dawn a crack appears in the wall
at noon it is large enough for a seed to fly into it
wind blown soil, over time,
fills it
the rest of us wait for the results
as the slit is pushed wider  and    w i  d   e    r
by natural crowbars that won't relent
the embryo nubbin, no longer a seed
its product forcing its way
OUT
inspecting sunlight
weakening the wall

at dawn
another crack appears




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Dulcinea
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1 posted 2001-08-16 08:34 PM


Funny how love does that...first the seed and then full cracks in the coldest of armor...*S* Nicely worded SR! *S*
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2 posted 2001-08-17 11:18 AM



Wonderful observations, and where's the cement?

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3 posted 2001-08-17 11:41 AM


nice... enjoy the metaphor and the visuals you have woven in this....

good one!

shadow of the fall
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4 posted 2001-08-17 11:44 AM


boy do I relate to this, I feel cracked most of the time  

Karen

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5 posted 2001-08-17 04:03 PM


Very cool write, SR...rather enjoyable read...I like it a lot!

sp  

can I see my world without you in it?
baby, not for a single minute...

ShadowRider
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6 posted 2001-08-18 06:52 AM


Dulcy:  ~huuuugg~  mmm could be about love....yes....musing....*s*

LadyInWhite:  laffin...i have no idea where the cement is!  Wish i knew!  
awww thank you for your response!

Cpat Hair:  I appreciate greatly your appreciation of the metaphors used here.  Tried
to make it apply to as many situ's as possible...*grin*  

SOF:  I may not be a Knight, either, *s*, but i have plenty of chinks of my armor, nevertheless!  *grin*  Thanks so much for reading!

SnowTrousers:  (i always smile when i read your name btw!)  You are much much
too kind.  Please that it gave you a reason to think and evaluate.....*smiles*

Love this forum, y'all!  You are very kind....sigh   SR

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