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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2001-08-16 07:12 PM



I've finally made a decision
this is how I know it must be
if you can't tell me that I have your love
then it's time, I must set myself free.
I can't bare to see you so sad
it brings a tear to my eye
You won't let me be there to help or hold you
and it makes my soul hurt and my heart cry.
I've always loved you, and I always will
but upon a wish I can't live
though if you wanted to share a dream
that would be something that I could give.
I'll be here if you need me
and if you should want me too
I know that deep in your heart
you know that my words are meant true.
I can't make myself not love you
but it's time I left go of the pain
because only through choosing to live
is how in life we do gain.
I'm asking you to do this;
to your own heart be true
for now we'll both do what we must
but baby please remember to live....
and remember that I LOVE YOU.


On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

[This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (edited 08-16-2001).]

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Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
1 posted 2001-08-16 07:48 PM


What a power packed expression from the heart.  Dealing with the poem itself, well, it is written in perfect cadence and flows through us with the emotion that it holds.  
Now for the message.  Love, though it is intangible in some rights, holds the promise of being able to touch it when it is shared and when that moment never comes, then it is hard not to become numb from hope and anticipation.  Wonderfully expressed and constructed equally as well.

MyEnchanted_Melody
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across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.
2 posted 2001-08-16 08:21 PM





if you can't tell me that I have your love
then it's time, I must set myself free.
-------------------

So much aching today in many poems.....or is it just me.....!!

I have felt your words just too strongly....they have touched me.....and you have expressed it all just wonderfully....

Thank you.....
***************************

"Oh...me!Oh Life!
Of the questions of these recurring..........
Of myself forever reproaching myself,
for who more foolish than I......"
~Whitman~

Marge Tindal
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3 posted 2001-08-17 02:24 AM


GentleSpirit~

'I can't make myself not love you
but it's time I left go of the pain'


Turning corners ...
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
                                   noles1@totcon.com            

Gentle Spirit
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4 posted 2001-08-17 03:01 PM


With every ending......there is a begining.......or at least I keep trying to convince myself of that anyhow.  *s*  
Thanks all.

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

rwood
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5 posted 2001-08-18 09:20 AM


So deeply soft this decision. It quietly sings to me the song written by Bonnie Raitt, (I can't make you love me).
quote:
Morning will come and I'll do what's right
Just give me till then to give up this fight
And I will give up this fight.


With an ending such as this, you certainly will find a beautiful new and deserving beginning.

Sincerely,
Regina

Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2001-08-18 09:33 AM


Gentle Spirit,
For every ending there is a begining. Very well done.

Gentle Spirit
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7 posted 2001-08-18 11:32 AM


Regina, Seymour, it is a decision that everyone must make......when the time is right.  It fills me with a sadness to have to feel this pain.  It fills me with a sadness that he has such despair inside, and that I can't help.  He must help himself.....I pray he finds the strength.  I believe we all find it when the time is right.  My time has come, and I hope for his to come soon also.  Writing the way that I do helps me to release everything that is inside.  I can only hope that this particular piece somehow showed him my words are true.  Thanks and hugs to all.......
Donna

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

sigheyes
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the winds of destiny
8 posted 2001-08-18 11:33 AM


Speechless, with tears.  Beautiful.
vandana
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9 posted 2001-08-18 04:35 PM


enjoy
JamesMichael
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10 posted 2001-08-18 04:45 PM


Like they say you can let go but if it reaches back and grabs you it isn't finished yet...love doesn't always begin and end exactly when we think it does...but I think it is a good idea not to hold on too tight...James
Enchantress
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11 posted 2001-08-18 04:53 PM


Lovely... very touching.
Through all the tears and sorrow and pain comes the one thought that makes me internally smile...'I have loved.' Take care of your spirit.

~Life is not measured by the breaths you take, but by the moments that take your breath away.~

Gentle Spirit
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12 posted 2001-08-18 07:10 PM


It brings to mind the songs "In this life, I was loved by you" and "I lived while you loved me"  That is the only feeling that I can walk away with this time.  Sometimes love leaves for unknown reasons, and other times it leaves because it has to.  It seems so much sadder when it has to.  Thanks all for your words of support.  They are much appreciated.  *s*

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

Butterflies_dont_cry
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13 posted 2001-08-18 10:38 PM


It takes a deeper love to let them go than
it does to hold them where they don't want
to be....a heart touching weave that sings
of love...and tears, both are evident and
easily felt by those whose eyes fall upon
this.  Excellent writing~

Gentle Spirit
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14 posted 2001-08-19 10:28 AM


Softly nodding my head and agreeing......yes it does.....but it doesn't make it much easier.  Thanks BDC.  Hugs.

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

[This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (edited 08-19-2001).]

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