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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2001-08-16 12:40 PM


I studied in silence
The ancient one

Leaning
at precarious angles
over waters edge

Gnarled trunk hovers
In defiance of gravity

Anchored by roots
Wriggled deeply
Between stones
and loose
Earth

Begging fish
It seems

to repose
In shadows

so as not to be
Without the company
Of other life

Stretching
As I rise

My own angles lessen
And roots are remembered

Without begging for
A stronger hold
Or fewer stones


© Copyright 2001 Cpat Hair - All Rights Reserved
RMW
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1 posted 2001-08-16 12:59 PM


Oh yes!
Martie
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2 posted 2001-08-16 12:59 PM


Cpat--The tree indeed can live through many world changes...lovely metaphore for strength and endurance.
Decaflame
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3 posted 2001-08-16 01:33 PM



There is a tree that stretches out over a pond that I visit...reaching westerly over the waters...

just as you describe...

you didn't tell me you were coming for a visit...

jellybeans
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4 posted 2001-08-16 02:52 PM


wow, with each new piece, you continue to amaze and excite...my mind loves the feel of reading you  
WRBreezin
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5 posted 2001-08-16 03:36 PM


Gnarled trunk hovers
In defiance of gravity

Anchored by roots
Wriggled deeply
Between stones
and loose
Earth


Those words have the power, the wealth is endless. Enjoyed, for sure!

Willie

[This message has been edited by WRBreezin (edited 08-16-2001).]

poetsguild
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6 posted 2001-08-16 05:52 PM


I didn't do a syllable count but the breaks give this piece the feel of a haiku. It also has a reverance for life that I appreciate.

Good work.

Krawdad
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7 posted 2001-08-16 06:11 PM


A tree is a tree is a tree is a tree, the fourth dimension being what it is, but you have put this one in its place nicely.
Thanks, I like it a bunch.
    
      

"As soon as the generals and the politicos can predict the motions of your mind, lose it."     Wendell Berry


SmittenKitten
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where the sky and horizon meet
8 posted 2001-08-16 06:29 PM


It is hard not to behold a tree like that with reverence...I enjoyed the peaceful perspective.
~Krista  

"Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you.
And all you can do is to go where they can find you."
~Winnie the Pooh

catalinamoon
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9 posted 2001-08-16 07:30 PM


Completely wonderful write.
Sandra

Nan
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10 posted 2001-08-17 09:03 AM


Stand tall - and be sufficiently humble to learn from that which has gone before us... I like it.. Capt Ron..
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